Monday, August 18, 2008

Beginning and Freshman Composition

Blogging in the Blogosphere
English 52, 60, 100


FORMAT:
When you blog, in the Title, write your first and last name as you would as if you are turning in a paper to me. Then you do not have to write my name because I know you are in my class. Write what English class you are in whether it is English 52, 60, 100 and what College.


For example, one would write:

Yue Hayes
English 52
Cerritos College
Post #1

Homelessness
Font size
In addition, for the title, pick the topic of discussion, grammar/organization, content, current events, pop culture or literature as a TITLE that we have discussed in class. Write the posts like this: write #1 Post or #2 Post or Post #50, so I can easily keep track of them and how many you write.

Of course, you are welcome to write more than several posts, and in doing so is another form of participation and does count in the participation grade. Perhaps, in class, you may not participate all that much but in the realm of the blogosphere, you can from the comfort of your own home,
  • reflect on the day's class discussion or offer up an insight that you found particularly interesting, etc., etc.

  • How does it change the way you think or thought before on the subject?

  • What actions might you take in the future? Anything is open to interpretation.


Of course, I need not go on and on about being respectful towards your peers' opinions and beliefs. If you disagree with another student's views be discreet about it: Do not say so and so is completely wrong because of this and that. Instead, say, I disagree with so and so and here are the reasons why I do. Go after their evidence and support and do not, I repeat do not attack someone else personally. This is supposed to be a forum for everyone to share their ideas and views.

*I will enforce the blogosphere by either deleting your hard work, making an example out of you here in the realm of the blogosphere or in class* . . .

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.monster. said...

Gabriel A Murillo
English 100
Cypress College

Addendum to my previous post

"well i am going to the Bolsa Chika Trip, are you? (you must feel obligated to answer now huh?). Jovana

Yes yes I do!

And yes I am going, LIKE A GOOD SO CAL RESIDENT.

I feel its my duty to clean our beaches!

I hope to see many many faces :]

Chao!

Anna Caludac said...

Baz Luhrmann is actually one of my favorite directors--I own his "Red Curtain Trilogy" which include his best-known films such as Moulin Rouge.I'm looking forward to watching "Australia", namely because I'm a huge Nicole Kidman fan, and I love "epic love" stories that make your boyfriend want to hang himself in the movie theaters. Hopefully, I won't be disappointed.

I enjoyed reading the "Sunscreen" reading by Baz Luhrmann--it was direct, and to the point, and cleverly written.

Bproffitt said...

Brandon Proffitt
English 100
Cypress College

Sunscreen
I believe the writer wants to get the point across that people abuse their bodies. If people take care of themselves they will live longer without complications.

nizzle said...

Nick Odierno
Eng.100
Cyp.

Q & A

The Q & A reading was very inspirational on the formating I will layout in my research paper. Though not in complete order by asking those questions there were apparent relationships that Carbon Dioxide had. There was the:

Issue = Global warming due to carbon dioxide



Solutions = Cut pollution, use less energy



Call to action = Buy hybrid vehicle's, energy-efficient appliances/fluorescent bulbs, Driving/maintenance habits, house insulation etc...

By stating, analyzing and submitting solutions a stronger more stable conclusion can be formed. So as I was reading, of course an old article popped into my head from some time ago. Did anyone know the emissions to produce a Prius are much higher then a Hummer! Those lithium Ion and polymer batteries are great, but whats that doing to the environment...? They are so dangerous and damaging to produce. We as consumers only see higher mileage and a lower gas bill.

follow this link...there are many alike:

http://www.sfgate.com/cgi-bin/
article.cgi?file=/chronicle/archive/
2007/06/04/DGI7Q63U01.DTL


really gets the juices flowing about how a lot of things are made for such greedy/selfish reasons...

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

anthony torres

I say stop global warming by filling big baloons with our air and send them into space pop them in space and then bring down the rubber and recycle it!

goood idea no?!

Marisela said...

I'm headed off to work. I started to work the crave yard shift at the hospital. Its not easy. I thought I would be fine being use to working 24 hr. shifts and all, but this is killing me. I ended up getting the flu and have been sneezing all day long....
.... We spoke of these "bad boys" in class but one must be aware that there is a fine line between a bad boy and a "loser". Usually the "bad boys" does not have a secure job nor have the motivation to get anywhere in life. They just live by the moment. Its pretty cool not having any worries but where will that take you?
This is just a little of how I feel. I do have experience with dealing with this "loser" "bad boy" persona.

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

Anthony Torres
Cerritos college

Why do people start up BS on the internet, especially when them MOD is THE TEACHER?


(sigh)


Kid's need to grow up, find something to do and maybe get a life

I'm tired of hearing E-BEEF

its really annoying

But then again Professor Hsiao gets a kick out of it.......mehhh

♥ Ali-Boo♥ said...

jovana thanks for the love yestrday in class!!... i esd do down and out and yet this class always seem to make me smile.. =)..orlando you are too kind! thanks for waiting with me and the convo was good esp. the advice i know im still young!!...thanks everyone much love!!

J.Driscoll said...

James Driscoll
English 52

Making are own Run-on's and fragments

Paganism is a unbella term for many religions some of the most famous of these Religions are Wicca,druidism,and Shaman there are meny other faiths under these umbrella but these are the most famous.

Wicca is the fastest growning relgion in the US. Fast as Islam


there you goooooooooooo

serenity40 said...

Shanion Flak
Eng 100
GWC

Proposal

Shannon Flak
Mr. Hsiao
English 100
11 November 2008

Proposal

My motivation for doing this paper on Domestic Violence is years being a victim of Domestic Violence. I am also doing this paper in hopes of showing someone, anyone, there is a way out from the grips of an abuser.
My research will be tilted towards showing how staying in an abusive relationship can cause many to turn towards drugs, alcohol etc…I also will be doing research on the long term effects abuse have on the children in a family, whom live with an abuser. My research will also be on how and where to find help for women and their family’s of Domestic Violence.
Looking for my research will be done on the internet, reading articles, looking up statistics and books on the internet. I will also be using books that have been published on Domestic Violence. My major is Human Services, which includes classes such as Crisis Intervention and Sociology. I will be utilizing my Crisis Intervention and Sociology book that has pertinent information and study’s done on Domestic Violence.

Question for final paper
I haven't had to write a lot of papers...When I am writing my 5-6 pages when I use information within my paper, from someone else, all is needed is to cite the work used correct?

RUN-ON

Children love to play in the sandbox having fun using their shovels and buckets.
1. Add a comma after sandbox and then a coordinating conjunction.
2. Period after after sandbox and and then a capital on having.
3. Semi colon...which we are not to use

FRAGMENT

John lost while playing pinball.
1. DC, IC...Put a comma after lost
2 IC DC...While playing pinball John lost.
3. +or-...remove while

Mr. Hsiao hope this was done correctly, please let me know if needs to be fixed.

kayla said...

Kayla Marley
English 100
Golden West
Post 39

Isaias I hope you are going to the wetlands. I would love to actually meet the face that I am talking too. As well as you Monster and Jovanna.

Here is my proposal:

Kayla Marley
Professor Hsiao
English 100
11 November 2008

The Era Never Forgotten

Millions upon millions of people died between the early 1930s and the mid-1940s. How was one man able to control millions of people’s minds to think just like he did? What exactly happened between those years? In the beginning of the semester we had learned about the Holocaust. We, the students, were given such a great opportunity and were able to go to the Museum of Tolerance. Not only were we given such a great opportunity to learn about everything that had happened during that time, but we were also given the opportunity to listen to a Holocaust surviver. I have always had such a great interest in learning all the information possible about what was going on during this time. When Mr. Hsiao said that the students were allowed to write about any topic that was discussed in class I was excited. I plan on explaining views and hatred that were seen during the Holocaust. The issues I will be explaining are the concentration camps, for there was more than one. I will be stating what happened inside of the concentration camps like how they were treated, what they were fed, and what they slept on, and also give an example of what happened by Viktor E. Frankl. I will define the definitions of racism, discrimination, and prejudice. I will link these three definitions accordingly into my final paper. I will explain what a concentration camp was and what activities took place in the camps. I will then explain what happened to the Nazi soldiers after the camps were taken over by the Americans. This was called the Nuremberg Trials. I will go into depth about punishments and what happened to the majority of the Nazi soldiers. I will be using a book called A Man’s Search for Meaning by Viktor E. Frankl for support of my essay. I will also be using EBSCO host in the Golden West Library for facts and numbers on how many people were killed during the decade plus a little more. I will go into full depth about how I feel about the era, and what thoughts went through my head while being at the Museum of Tolerance. I will explain my experience being in a replica of a gas chamber and watching horrible footage from the Holocaust. I will also give my beliefs on how we, as people, are able to stop this mass murder from happenging again.


Fragment:

1. I cannot wait any longer. To get my laptop computer.
Revision: I cannot wait any longer to get my laptop computer.

2. Because it will help with school work. I can use the laptop daily.
Revision: I can use the laptop daily because it will help with school work.

3.Would be able to burn music. And make CDs.
Revisions: My laptop would be able to burn music, and make CDs.

Run On's:

1. I could not believe my eyes when I saw The Eagles on tour The Eagles have such an energetic vibe when they play their songs.
Revision: I could not believe my eyes when I saw The Eagles on tour; The Eagles have such an energetic vibe when they play their songs

2. One of my favorite songs is Take It Easy I sang my heart out when they were playing it.
Revision:One of my favorite songs is Take It Easy, and I sang my heart out when they were playing it.

3.After the show was over I could not hear anything for days I felt like I had to keep asking people to repeat everything they said to me.
Revision: After the show was over I could not hear anything for days. I felt like I had to keep asking people to repeat everything they said to me.

Jovana said...
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Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Shanon:

Yes. its easy but complicated at first. lol. ok so here's what you have to do.

this is how it would look.
-example:

Lopez, Jovana. Why Batman will Rock Spiderman California: Norwalk, 2008

the "why batman will rock spiderman" is supposed to be underlined, but it wont let me show you.
so its just a guide for Mr. H to know where your source is from and something he can refer to if he becomes confused for any reason.


if i confused you. which i tend to do alot. here is a website that just might help you out k buddy.

http://www.csus.edu/owl/index/mla/mla_format.htm

GOD SPEED!

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Aleceah:
im not sure i spelled your name right. lol. but yea babygirl. you are very welcome. anytime you need anyone to converse with or wanna just vent with, i am here for you ok? just put a smile on your face, because like i said on Wednesday ... "pretty girls arent allowed to cry" =] hehe. stay up sweetie. and ill give you my number on Monday, and if you want to talk or hang out, im more than happy too ok? =]

"one guy doesnt amount to such a beautiful girl"

all he has is ... well point blank NOTHING! you have the world in your hands babes.

he might be the first, but beleive me when i say he wont be the last. ♥♥♥

Monster:
i knew it lol hehe whoo hoo! i got monster to blog again. =]

and you will def see my face <3

Kayla:
Yeah man, see you there. =]

THE WEEKEND:
Thank GOD its the weekend! finally. well im not going out tonight ... =[ i would but i want to take my little sister to Norwalk High School's last football game. so ill be watching that and hopefully they win. ALTHOUGH!!! tomorrow im going out with my friends (Isaias, Cely, Sal, and maybe Amador) and it is going to ROCK!!! whoo hoo.!! i cant wait. Party!!

sorry for being OFF topic Mr H. =]
Everyone have a great weekend, be productive, live your life, and smile!

"Be optimistic, Dont you be a grumpy ... when the road gets bumpy, just smile smile smile and be happy"
♥♥♥

you have one life to live ... why waiste it?

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

One last thing ...

where is Melissa? Georgie? Jenny? Andres? Cypress kids? Golden West kids?

just wondering. =]

FRIDAY IS MY DAY!!!

cathrina86 said...

Cathrina Afusia
Cerritos College
English 52
Proposal

Teen Pregnancy
I am strongly thinking about writing my paper on teen pregnancy. Teen pregnancy was one of our focuses in our debates, where the pros and cons were discussed. From those debates I wanted to know more about the topic. I want to get into the history of early teen pregnancy. I do know that in some cases early pregnancy was arranged between two families. How did it go from being something celebrated, to something that was looked at as if it were a sin? I am looking forward to doing detailed interviews. I cannot imagine every teen pregnancy being a mistake. I know there has to be some sort of reason why these girls feel they need a baby to complete them as a person. My motivation for this topic actually came from my own experience. At age fifteen I unfortunately was a statistic of teen pregnancy. Though the pregnancy was not successful, it was an experience of my own. I had a lot to deal with at such a young age. I know everyone has a different story. I want to try and understand in every way possible the other likely reasons for teenage pregnancy. I want to gain the knowledge on how to help this issue, which seems to rise in numbers every year. I plan on using EBSCO host for supporting articles. I also want to talk to at least two teen mothers. I would like to see if there are any other avenues we as a society can do to help lower the teen pregnancy numbers. I think a lot of times we see anyone under the age of eighteen as not having a voice. I want to write a paper that gives the teens a voice, and also let the teens out there know that their issue is being acknowledged. I want a teen who reads my paper to see some of the other effects that teen pregnancy has had on children in their same shoes. Sometimes we do not see what is going on around us, until we actually see someone else going through it also.

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

Anthony torres
Cerritos college


Okay Professor Hsiao, i was wondering......How can i write my Rough draft in the format you want us to write it in?
Example:
Hook________
background______
thesis_____
map sentence_______
BP1
BP2
BP3
conclusion

can i still use this outline? does it matter how long any of the catagories are?

I know how to do it i just want to see if i have to have an hook, thesis etc. for every topic of my paper

1)initiation of gang life
2)family-ism
3)solutions

Pretty much do i have to have an outline for every topic of my paper?

HAHAHAH i think i just explained my self....but i still want to know how i should do it....just to make sure!

Thanks

eva villalobos said...

Eva Villalobos
English 52
Cerritos College

Research paper proposal
Native Language

Would ones life be richer by mastering a second language? The people one can communicate with, the culture one is indroduce to, the opportunities it will present will enrich it and career advacement one will receive. Spanish has a long history in the United States. There are many different languages use, but Spanish is the most widely use foreign language in the country. Having the ability to speak both English and Spanish can give a person many advantages over someone that only speaks one language. It is more appealing when the both languages is spoken correctly, so ether way understanding and speaking the language a little can help. My motivation for this topic is precisely because I speak both Spanish and English. I sometime have trouble with the English language, but I am working on it. I want to research the great advantages because knowing them will give me a grater sense of interest on correting my writting and speech. There are many great sources to look at. I will look in the internet on EBSCO HOST, and Dogpile.com. I will go to the library and check some books on the topic. I will try to ask people what they think about speaking two languages, if they get any advantages from it. I will definably reserch on the advantages of specking two languages on the job, bacause I believe that is very important.

eva villalobos said...

Eva Villalobos
English 52
Cerritos College

Fragments

1) Latinos recognize that learning English is key to economic success. According to studies.

Fix-(DC,IC) According to studies, latinos recognize that learning English is key to economic success.

2) According to the Pew report. Only 23% adult first-generation Latinos say thy can carry on a conversation very well in English.

Fix-(IC DC) Only 23% adult first-generation Latinos say they can carry on a conversation very well in English according to the Pew report.

3) Parents could benefit from learning English working with ESL students.

Fix-(+) Parents could benefit from learning English while working with ESL students.

eva villalobos said...

Eva Villalobos
English 52
Cerritos College

Run-Ons

1) I want my children to speak Spanish and English I know that learning both languages will benefit them.

Fix-(.) I want my children to speak Spanish and English. I know that learning both languages will benefit them.

2) The ability to learn a second language will assist one in getting job offers it depends on how well it is spoken.

Fix-(;) The ability to learn a second language will assist one in getting job offers; it depends on how well it is spoken.

3) I have learn to speak two languages I hope my children do the same thing.

Fix-(,cc) I have learn to speak two languages, so I hope my children do the same thing.

John Hsiao said...

Many a time there has been divergences, and everything in life will reach a homeostasis in one form or another, an equilibrium if you will:

Whatever rises/falls must/will converge, and I am hoping in all my classes that there will be a convergence, and it is happening in one form or another as we speak:

Remember that the blogosphere is a place of acceptance and understanding and a searching for the truth: Most of all, it is a place where everyone and anyone can /should/must feel comfortable.

Neither will I lecture nor will I discuss what is proper/improper; decent/indecent; correct/incorrect; and so and so forth, but in the past few weeks egos have gotten the best of us and common sense has left us.

Pride is such an illusory thing that it cannot be unleashed on its own because its only recourse is one of destruction/oppression/hate/discord/disconnection/ and the list goes on and on and on.

What I have seen of late is good: a gathering of souls who seek to connect and share--that is what the blogosphere is built for. It is not as many of you have said: it is not for pettiness, e-beef (Interesting as always Anthony), and other qualifiers that I need not search for.

You understand what I am saying here.

The Rules of the Game are changing, and the same students who headed up the blogosphere in the beginning are not the same ones who are ending here: That is just an observation and not a critique.

The Grades are coming, and I will take all the Ethos/Pathos/Logos into account, and those students who finish strong--here in the blogosphere, in the classroom, service learning and field trip wise will be taken into account, and these upcoming projects/papers/assignments and such--will do well.

It is common sense, but I need to say it because some of you are doubting yourself, and there have been several more students around you who have dropped since the deadline to Withdraw.

Have heart,
Do not be too proud,
But instead stay humble,
Work hard and diligently,
Cross the t's and dot the i's
And you know you will earn the grade
You deserve.

I need to remind every class of that as we finish this last month.

Get your business done. . .and do not come to me with your excuses because I will not take them.

The early returns are promising, however:

Kayla and Shannon have posted the run-ons and fragments as well as their Research Proposal.

Shannon, you are fine--conscientiousness always in play.

Kayla, thank you for your excitement and enthusiasm.

Catherine, sounds like an interesting topic, and I expect the best from you (You already know that, do you not?)

However, you need to do the run-ons and fragments as well.

James, your exercises do not make sense grammatically? Even if they did, you talk about Paganism and what not, and I always try to understand even in our class. Perhaps, I am not listening or keying in on your discussions.

Mia culpa

Eva, Good work as always. Do you see how she separated the Final Research Proposal and the Run-ons and Fragments?!

Exactly

I was expecting you to call out your classmates, and I half-heartedly expected it to be so.

Some are coming on strong and getting their business done: I see it.

Just finish what you have to finish, and we can all enjoy Christmas Break when we finish.


*¨¨*:·..·:*¨¨*:·..·:*¨¨*:·..·:*¨¨*:·..·:*¨¨*:
Remember, that I balanced these Collage/Poem Projects with the Final Research Paper to add some enjoyment and fun to the necessary writing. Enjoy this last rendezvous with yourself if you will:

The poems/collage will be snapshot in time of what you like and dislike and will be representative of the person you are at this specific moment in time.

I will go into more detail as we go on. . .

John Hsiao said...

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Great Work

Everyone!!!

John Hsiao said...

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.monster. said...

Gabriel Murillo
English 100
Cypress College

Proposal

Issue

Tattoos are not looked at as a good thing in the Hispanic Community. Families from a Hispanic background often look down on people with tattoos.

Solution

Inform older generations about it as an art form in ordeer to understand the "why" of this topic. I will inform the reader that tattoing is an art from where the body becomes a canvas.


Truth
Why is it that tattoos are looked at in a bad way? how can old and young generations meet halfway in order to understand tattoos as an art form.

rockyramadhani said...

Rocky Ramadhani
English 52
Cerritos College

Drug Rehabilitation
Many young teenager among around us already do drugs by the time they turn 16. It is such a shame for knowing this fact, but it is the truth. There are a lot of them who need help from us, or from anybody who really care about this serious problem. One possible solution for them drug addicts might be drug rehabs. I do not want to start to talk about jail to be the solution for this. Not just jails are going to make them much worse criminal than before because all they see inside there were all many other bad influence from other criminals, so when they get out from jail, they still do a lot of bad things on their everyday life. It is just not worth it at all. On the other hand, there a lot of benefits that comes from drug rehabs. I could say that drug rehabs can give back a life that was once lost. There two categories of drug rehabs benefits. There are the emotional kind and the mental category as well. Just to put it in one simple conclusion, there is big possibility for the drug addicts become healthy and be happy without the use of the chemicals once they finished their program there. In the end, it is all going to be such a happy ending for the family, friends, and the most important person, themselves. Moreover, the main purpose for me to discuss this big issue right here is just simply to help the unfortunate people that happens to be involved in this situation. Many sources could help me to discuss this issue. From EBSCO host, websites from google or yahoo, and from some books that have some information about people who have experienced all of that stuff above.


Fragments
1.
When Michael Jordan told him to practice. He ignored him and ran away.
(DC,IC)
When Michael Jordan told him to practice, he ignored him and ran away.

2.
Ashton Kutcher went to modeling agency, because his friends always tell him that he got the looks.
(IC DC)
Ashton Kutcher went to modeling agency because his friends always tell him that he got the looks.

3.
Because Batman always hide under his mask. People in Gotham never know who he really is.
(DC->IC DC)
Batman always hide under his mask. People in Gotham never know eho he really is.

Run-ons.
1.
There is a will there is a way.
(.)
There is a will. There is a way.

2.
I want to borrow her laptop, she want to borrow mine.
(;)
I want to borrow her laptop; she want to borrow mine.

3.
Batman is the greatest superhero Joker is the scariest villain.
(,cc)
Batman is the greatest superhero, and Joket is the scariest villain.

.monster. said...

Gabriel Murillo
English 100
Cypress College

1) I want communities to get along with each other because cooperation will only benefit those communities.

Fix-(.) I want communities to get along with each other. Because cooperation will only benefit those communities.

2) Our sense of exploration has left our minds and disappeared with extint animals it is up to us to revive it

Fix-(;) Our sense of exploration has left our minds and disappeared with extint animals; it is up to us to revive it

3) I would love to live in a better world I try t change it one day at a time

Fix-(,cc) I would love to live in a better world, so I try t change it one day at a time

**$ammyWammy** said...

Samantha Luque
English 52
Cerritos College
Post 1

Fragments

1. If I was a superstar. I would want to be just like Lucille Ball.
(DC,IC)
If I was a superstar, I would want to be just like Lucille Ball.

2. My boyfriend won me a big teddy bear. When we were at the city's carnival.
(ICDC)
My boyfriend won me a big teddy bear when we were at the city's carnival.

3. When I went to my mom's house. I ate all the candy she had on the table.
(DC INTO IC)
I went to my mom's house and I ate all the candy she had on the table.

**$ammyWammy** said...

Samantha Luque
English 52
Cerritos College
Post 2

Run-ons

1. At thanksgiving I love eating turkey only if there is no kind of fat on it.
(,cc)
At thanksgiving I love eating turkey, but only if there is no kind of fat on it.

2. My mom loves reading murder books everybody teases her that she is planning a murder.
(.)
My mom loves reading murder books. Everybody teases her that she is planning a murder.

3. When I go to school monday through wedsday it drains me out physically and emotionally.
(;)
When I go to school monday through wedsday; it drains me out physically and emotionally.

Gerardo!! said...

Gerardo Rodriguez
english 52
cerritos

Three ways to fix run ons and fragments.

Reggie Bush ran all over the teams in the NFL. He is number 25, but at USC, he wore the number 5 jersey number.

Gerardo!! said...

Gerardo Rodriguez
english 52
cerritos

My paper is going to be on gang life. im going to talk about the pros and cons about the topic as well as putting my spin on the subject.

kayla said...

Kayla Marley
English 100
Golden West College
Post 39

I hope no one is being effected by the fires. If so, my prayers are with you.

It is getting crazy out of control. =[

kayla said...

affected*

Marisela said...

Marisela
English 52
Proposal
Middle Age/Late Pregnancy
There are numerous amounts of detailed subjects to research but I have chosen a subject that hits close to home. Many benefits come out of starting a family at an age that many would consider to be late, anywhere from 25 years to 40 years of age. I was raised by two parents which had decided to start their family at an older age. My father and mother are perfect examples of this topic. They were not the typical Hispanic family which would start at a teenage stage but waited till they were financially and emotionally ready. My mother was twenty-eight years old when she even considered to bare a child, and my father was also very late in age when he was blessed with his first daughter. He was forty-five years old. This would be an excellent topic to research for myself. I would be able to find out the pros and cons on a middle age parent. Use this information to my advantage in order to start my own family. I strongly believe that this was the best decision they had made. Starting one’s family after one has finished school and career is best for the child. I will be able to write more on this topic if I am given the opportunity to do so. The other topic that I may have interest in is Media Education and its benefits. This is another subject that I find very wide in detail. One has to remember that Media in television is very young in age, yet we find ourselves feeding off of it like if it were ancient history. I would be interested and would put fourth the effort in researching any of these two topic. This is one of the final papers and I will try my hardest to ensure an interesting research essay.
Fragments
1. Brenda is sleeping she is not coming to the party.
1a. She is not coming to the party because she is sleeping. (IC, DC)
2. She might be a mean person she is still very beautiful inside.
2a. She might be a mean person, but she is still very beautiful inside. (DC, IC)
3. My friend is sick he is acting like a baby.
3a. My friend is is sick with the flu so he is acting like a baby.
(+ or -)
Run-0n's
1. I hear noise in the background nothing is more annoying.
1a. I hear noise in the background. Nothing is more annoying then noise. (.)
2. I try to fall in love falling in love is hard to do.
2a. I try to fall in love; but falling in love is hard to do. (;)
3. I run from my emotions I run far far way.
I run from my emotions, so I run far far way. (,cc)

♥ Ali-Boo♥ said...

Run On:

I went to the beach there were no waves.

1.(.) after beach.
2.(,cc) after beach.
3.(;) after beach

Fragments:

There's no turning back. Since I only tend to move forward

1.DC IC
There's no turning back since
I only tend to move forward.
2.IC,DC
I only tend to move froward, since theres no turning back.
3.(+/-)
Since I only tend to move forward, theres no turning back.

♥ Ali-Boo♥ said...

I have a quick question! Do we have to turn in our first draft tomorrow? OR just blog what we have found so far.

Maria M said...

Maria Castillo
English 100
Golden West College
Proposal
The topic that will be writing about in the final research paper is about poverty. I will research in depth poverty that is seen in the United States and all over the world. Poverty is seen all over the world in different levels. Poverty does not discriminate any person that it attacks. The causes and effects that poverty does in every family. The psychological aspect a person goes through poverty. What determines if a person is consider poor or not. How poverty is caused in different parts in the world. Especially in third world countries, that are suffering from high poverty levels. One of my topics will be the way the poverty is seen in Africa. Different actions that people have taken to escape from poverty. The actions that cause a person that is wealthy to become poor. The effects that it gives to people that goes from rich to poor. My motivation for researching is to inform others about the problem. The different ways people can help out for the cause. Even though there are organizations, it is not enough to aid everyone. The potential sources that can be used are articles in the New York Times, and EPSCO HOST articles. As well as a book called, Keep Waking, by Larry Jones. The book is talks about how the author wants to feed children. He wants to have everyone help children feed. This can be used in the call to action paragraph. The back up topic I have is to research about global warming.
Question: Are we allowed to use a questions in the introduction paragraph?

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Unknown said...

GOLDEN WEST
ENGLISH 100
PROPOSAL PAPER*

Young teenage Pregnancies VS Middle aged Pregnancies

Young teen pregnancies are a major issue in today’s society. Although I am not for young teen pregnancy, I would like to further my research on this subject. From the debate I have found several facts pertaining to diseases and birth defects, resulting in a late pregnancy. The middle aged women out there have no idea what they are setting themselves up for when it comes to having a later pregnancy. Teenagers and young adults may not be mentally stable to conceive a baby at this time, but their bodies are. I want to write about preventions of unplanned teenage age pregnancies and the positive effects of having a child at a young age. I have noticed that more and more adults are having children in their early forty’s. I wonder if they know that birth defects increase with age and there are many symptoms. On the other hand older parents are finically stable but it depends on the family’s arranged situation. I want to look more into when the body is fully developed and when is the ideal time frame to conceive an embryo. A young parent has more energy, they are productive and can supply more nutrients for the mother and the baby. The elasticity of the skin and the recovering time is great for a young adult when it comes to a pregnancy. Although the question is can the body go through such enduring pain at such a young age?
I plan on getting my research from some doctors I know, medical or nutrition magazines, books, and the internet. I have already found several websites from researching for the debate, but I plan on interviewing a specialist or reading an embryological book also.

Anonymous said...

Jon Croft
English 100
Golden West College
Post #14

Proposal

Preface:
The inspiration from this paper came from a presentation in my psychology class, where I spoke aboot the effects of anger on the thought process. I wasn't able to say everything I wanted to say, which left me constantly thinking about the subject. When you assigned the final paper, I knew right then what I would write about.

I have always been fascinated by my own struggles with anger, and what kinds of decisions I make when under its influences. I also am fascinated by what others do under the same circumstances. This is not limited to just anger, but to any other emotion. On this topic, there are three sides to the argument of what should influence our thought process. One is to let our emotions reign supreme and make all our decisions for us. The opposite is to let our intellect reign supreme and make all our decisions for us. The middle point of these two sides is a combination of using our emotions with our intellect to make our decisions.

Run-ons:
#1. Don't fight a brick the brick will win.
Answer: Place ", for" after the first brick.

#2. Captain Hornswaggle left his apron in the brig his eye-patch is there as well.
Answer: Place a semicolon after brig.

#3. Please do not feed the animals they will become fat and lazy like most of our society if you do.
Answer: Place a comma after animals along with a cc (for, in this case)

Fragments:
#1. When life closes a door. One should blow open the wall.
Answer: (IC DC) One should....when life closes a door.

#2. The great pancake robbery succeeded. While they rode off into the sunset with their loot.
Answer: (+/-) Remove "While".

#3. Because I attempted to manslaughter a police officer vehicularly. I will go to jail.
Answer: (DC, IC) Place a comma after vehicularly.

Maria M said...

Maria Castillo
English 100
Golden West College

Run ons
My dog was hungry and thirsty he demanded for his water and food.

1.)My dog was hungry and thirsty, he demanded for his water and food.
2.)My dog was hungry and thirsty; he demanded for his water and food.
3.)My dog was hungry and thirsty, and he demanded for his water and food.

Fragments
Although he was hungry. He didn't finish his food.
1.)Although he was hungry, he didn't finish his food.
2.)He didn't finish his food although he was hungry.
3.)He was hungry he didn't finish his food.

SONNY said...

Sonny Karmokar
Eng 52
Cerritos College
Runons

1} the cat chased the mouse the cat caught the mouse
{.}The cat chased the mouse. The cat caught the mouse.

2} the titanic set sail for its maaiden voyage the ship sank in the atlantic
{,cc}The Titanic set sail for its maiden voyage, but it sank in the Atlantic.

3} the nfl has many great players troy polamalu is one of the many.
{;}The NFL has many great players; Troy Polamalu is one of the many.

SONNY said...

Sonny Karmokar
Eng 52
Cerritos College
Fragments

1} people should not start unnecessary fires. because it is very dangerous.
{ICDC}People should not start unnecessary fires because it is very dangerous.

2} because it is very dangerous. people should not sart unnecessary fires.
{DC,IC}People should not start unnecessary fires, because it is very dangerous.

3} why do people start fires, altough they know it is dangerous?
{DC->IC}Why do people start fires. They know it is dangerous.

corona said...

Brittany Corona
English 60
Cypress College

RUNONS

1.I went to the store,and I didn't buy anything.

2.I went to the store;I didnt buy anything.

3.i went to the store. I didn't buy anything.

FRAGMEANTs

1.This weekend,i went shopping for new clothes.

2.I went shoupping for new clothes this weekend.

3.This weekend i spent all my moeny.

**$ammyWammy** said...

Samantha Luque
English 52
Cerritos College
Post 1

Proposal

Media Forces Body Image:
I am proposing my first top choice for this research essay. The topic I have chosen to argue is, that media impacts a young girls body image in a negative way. I have followed and studied this topic religiously, since the beginning of my high school years. I am so passionate about this topic because, I have struggled through my weight, and the image I have denied and shamed for so many years. I want to be a voice for young girls everywhere; skinny or big, because it is a fact that all girls have had issues with body image, and I have been in their shoes before. The Media’s portray on body image; is disturbing and plain old fantasy. Media teaches young girls that having that “perfect” body, gives you what you want, grabs attention to the opposite sex, and that no one with except you for you. This is the wrong way to boost up a girls self-esteem, because all it does is make a girl either, depressed, suicidal or carry a eating disorder. The sad thing to this is; that there are people out there that fight for this issue such as, Tyra Banks and Monique; from the show “Parkers”. They are speaking to people that this is a big and dangerous thing for young girls. The people are just not listening, and do not want to take any kind of action at all. These two women are powerful with their words they chose to say to young girls, all over America. Two years ago, I took my action, by helping out six young girls with their issues. The issues with body image and wanting to fit in, because they fell to pressures of peers and media. I am still wanting to take action on this, as long as I life. In this essay of mine, I want to focus on how some celebrities, models, all magazines and TV shows impact a young girls body image negatively. I am just tired of people not taking this issue seriously or either taking action to help young girls in their life’s.

Erin said...

Erin Wahl
English 52
Cerritos College

My boyfriend lives in Rowland Heights (right next to Diamondbar and Brea) so I have been over there helping pack up in case the fires make it to his neighbor hood. So I have been running around like crazy with him and his family trying to get everything out. It is crazy and I hope no one lives over there, and if so I wish the best for you. Anyways here is my homework.

AIDS in America
AIDS in America, it is being spread through out our country because of lack of education. Some people choose to ignore the problem and think that it could never happen to them. AIDS is a disease that does not discriminate, it does not care if the person is male or female, what their race is or even how old the person is. There is a number of ways one could get AIDS, no matter how much people would like to think it is a “gay disease”. People living with AIDS need all of the help they can get, many of them end up loosing their jobs, health insurance, dental insurance, housing and some even loose their families to the disease.
Five days after my second birthday, my uncle died of AIDS related causes. This is a subject that has really impacted my life and is something that I am very passionate about

Run-ons
My cat is fat and lazy, yet she never stops it is always play time with her.

My friend wants me to go help him build his race truck. I have a lot of home work to do.

A lot of Southern California is on fire; it is moving closer and closer to my boyfriends house.

Fragments

I am a picky eater. He gets mad because I will not eat many foods.

I am a picky eater, and he gets mad because I will not eat many foods.

I love. Racing when we have no problems.

I love racing when we have no problems.

Because I can get a job as an EMT. I need to pass the test soon.

I need to pass the test soon because I can get a job as an EMT.

corona said...

BRITTANY CORONA
ENGLISH 60
CYPRESS COLLEGE

propsal

i plan on writing about gangs in general.i picked number 7 as the form to do it in. explaining the cause of why kids decide to join gangs . Then get the effect of being in a gang. My last paragragh will just be about what happens like after being in a gang mainly you cant get out of it. I plan on getting lots of facts and percentages on the kids that join gangs. Also I want to find out why they would want to join gangs in the first place. I want to learn what is like being in a gang. I would like to interview someone who is happy about being in a gang. Also I would like to interview some one who wishes they never joined a gang. I dont know alot about gangs so hope to find out more gnags in general. What is like being a gang memeber.
thats it peace out

John Hsiao said...

Alicia,

as well as for all my classes,

the Rough Draft will be due on Monday or Tuesday:

We need to get on it as soon as possible because the semester is almost done.

I will talk about the poem and collage more as well next class meeting.

Keep up the grammar posts and research proposals coming.

John Hsiao said...

Our prayers and thoughts go out to all those who have been affected/effected by the fires.

The News have said that we could have had worse fire destruction if the Santa Anas had come earlier or with much more duration this year, but we have been believe it or not more fortunate than in other years.

However, those families whose houses have burned do not have that consolation.

Prayers and Thoughts

Araceli Garcia said...

ARACELI GARCIA
ENGLISH 52

RUN-ONS

1)The ashes landed all over my car i have to wash my car now.

-(.) The ashes landed all over my car. I have to wash my car now.

2) It is amazing how fire helps us survive this fire can kill us as well.

-(;) It is amazing how fire helps us survive; this fire can kill us as well.

3) I need to purchase my dream car I just can't pick between a new Audi A4 or a 59'Cadillac El Dorado.

-(,cc) I need to purchase my dream car, but I just can't pick between a new Audi A4 or a 59' Cadillac El Dorado.

FRAGMENTS

1) Whatever the case is. One should never give up.

-(DC,IC)Whatever the case is, one should never give up.

2) And very unique. The white tiger is beautiful.

-(ICDC)The white tiger is beautiful and very unique.

3) Since Poison Ivy cares about plants. That makes her more beautiful.

-(+ or -)Poison Ivy cares about plants and that makes her more beautiful.

Araceli Garcia said...

I FEEL SO BAD FOR THE PEOPLE THAT LOST THEIR HOMES DUE TO THE FIRES.I HEARD YESTERDAY THAT OVER 800 HUNDRED HOUSES HAD BURNED DOWN! I COULD NOT BELIEVE THIS.... I GUESS THIS IS GLOBAL WARMING TAKING ITS COURSE....... OR IT CAN BE SOMETHING ELSE.IT IS JUST CRAZY HOW WE ARE IN MID NOVEMBER AND IT IS STILL HOT! I JUST CANT IMAGINE HOW MUCH WORSE IT IS GOING TO GET IN THE YEARS TO COME........... I GUESS WE NEED TO START ADAPTING TO THE HEAT.MY PRAYERS TO ALL THE FAMILIES THAT LOST THEIR HOMES....... WITH THE ECONOMY SO BAD, THIS IS THE LAST THING THEY NEEDED........VERY SAD :(

mikey said...

Michael Olson
English 60
Prof. Hsiao
12 November, 2008
Post #9


Research Proposal

I am proposing to make the Disabilities Act of 1990 (Americans with Disabilities Act of 1990 proper) the subject of my final essay. I thought this would be the most logical subject for the essay as there are many aspects of my life that have been directly affected by the Act. I will also be talking about what changes have been made since it was signed into office by George H. W. Bush, critical reception and what major events have happened since being signed, and critical criticism associated with the broad definition of the term “disabled”.

The main subject of the essay will be an analytical reflection of how the Disabilities Act of 1990 has affected my lifestyle, both positively and negatively. As a precursor to my main point, I will outline in the essay with a narrative list of a majority of things that have been changed that directly relate to me, and possibly explain in detail or just touch upon them. Some of these details include the inclusion of enabling public devices such as cross-walk buttons and sensors, accommodations to mainstream, commercial and private properties and buildings, and changes to the style of work ethics within businesses and overall change in perception upon Handicapped or Disabled people, whether it be positive or have apathetically influenced me.

Source of preliminary research: http://finduslaw.com/americans_with_disabilities_act_of_1990_ada_42_u_s_code_chapter_126

Unknown said...

GOLDEN WEST
ENGLISH 100

GRAMMER*

RUN-ONS:
1) I went to the mall bought a purse jeans and shoes.
answer: I went to the mall and bought a purse, jeans, and shoes.
2) The air is filled with thick smoke it is hard to breathe.
answer: The air is filled with thick smoke; it is hard to breath.
3) Young teen pregnancies are looked down on in today's society because they are morally wrong but some people do not know the birth defects that come in hand with a late preganancy.
answer: Young teen pregnancies are looked down on in today's society. Although they are morally wrong, some people do not know the birth defects that come in hand with a late pregnancy.

Danyelleyvonne said...

Thomas Danielle
Eng 52
Cerritos College
Proposal

My preferred topic is eating disorders which include Obesity and Anorexia/Bulimia. Obesity is infecting our children at a rapid rate, and is exposing them to the Type 2 Diabetes disease. It’s like a modern day epidemic that can so easily be avoided. On the other hand, we have the same age range of children pre-exposing themselves to the dangers of Anorexia and Bulimia. Their precious minds are being controlled by the media’s influences, and the pop magazines who are glorifying unhealthy waist sizes. We have constant fast food commercials running during and between our favorite shows. McDonalds runs contests for a Monopoly game where one can better their chances of winning by frequently ordering (large) menu items. I challenge one to find that same game piece on a salad or carton of milk found on the same ordering menu. There are also shows like America’s Next Top Model, where one only sees skinny model contestants. America’s Next Top Model places girls weighing over 120 pounds in the “Plus Size” model category. Unless one is 4 feet and at 120 lbs, that weight on a 5’5” girl is pretty thin. Our eating habits are taught to us by the people who should know better, our parents. We mirror their eating habits, whether it be dealing with emotions through sweets and other comfort foods, or controlling pant sizes with fad diets. I would like to expose the ugly truth, effects of eating disorders which might open the eyes of people currently going through some. I would like propsose my ideas of how we can change the progession of eating habits as well as research successful approaches already put to the test. I have personally experienced the consequences of being considered obese, and the struggles of being very underweight for my height.

Unknown said...

GOLDEN WEST
ENGLISH 100
GRAMMER*

FRAGEMNTS:
1) I went to bed. A little bit after tweleve.
answer: A little bit after twelve, I went to bed.
2) Although diet coke has no calories. It is not good for you.
answer: Diet coke has no calories, it is not good for you.
3) Because I was driving too fast. I got a ticket.
answer: I got a ticket because I was driving too fast.

Unknown said...

GOLDEN WEST
ENGLISH 100
GRAMMER*

FRAGEMNTS:
1) I went to bed. A little bit after tweleve.
answer: A little bit after twelve, I went to bed.
2) Although diet coke has no calories. It is not good for you.
answer: Diet coke has no calories, it is not good for you.
3) Because I was driving too fast. I got a ticket.
answer: I got a ticket because I was driving too fast.

Cianna said...

cianna calandrino
English 100
Golden west

proposal

I picked level 6 in organizing my final paper. my topic is Alcoholism and the family disease. Cause: drinking for the alcoholic is a coping skill they learn, wether it be from a family member or even from TV. Some start out using drink as just something to do for fun. For some people they have the gene that makes them addicted to alcohol. Not everyone does which leads me to the Effect. The family around them have an addiction as well, the alcoholic.
Sometimes the family will "Love" the alcoholic to death. They feel that if they could only love that person more then that person will stop drinking. This is my truth, the alcoholic has to figure out for themselves that they may have a problem controlling there drinking. The people around the alcoholic needs to realize that in order for them to get better they have to let go of the illusion of control. Meaning the control of trying to change the drinker. The drinker needs to find there own bottom. I will also apply some of my own experience with the drinker as my own truth. I am excited to write this paper.

so far unarmed/marshall said...

marshall rhodes
engish 60
cypress
professor Hsiao
3 wats to fix a runon and frag

3 ways to fix a frag.
dc, ic
ic then dc
coordinated conjunction

3 ways for a run-on
.
,
fanboys

John Hsiao said...

Marshall,

You have to come up with your own sentences instead of just give the methods in order to fix them.

Perhaps, music would be a subject or the _Sons_of_Anarchy_

John Hsiao said...

All,

Some of your grammar exercise sentences are interesting just like the singular personality who wrote them.

All makes for interesting reads though.

Definitely

Yliana said...

Yliana Velasco
English 52
cerritos college
post 28???

My proposal for the reasearch paper is on Global Warming. I am doing the cause and effect, i see that it would be a good organization because of course there are causes to global warming and definetly effects to it. I have researched a little bit and i the main cause of global warming is carbon dioxide. This planet is producing too much carbon dioxide that comes from cars, factories, pollution, and many other things. This is causing alot of the animal species to become extinct because the environment they are used to live with is changing and they are not able to survive. There are ways to fix it and its gonna be hard and long because everyone would have to participate and save our planet.

Anonymous said...

Rachel Todd
Eng 100
GWC

Proposal:

What effect does age have on pregnancy? In older women it affects fertility, have an increased rate in birth defects, an increased rate in miscarriage, and the women are more likely to have a pre- existing health problem. Also, teen pregnancies pose a risk as well. Most teen’s bones aren’t completely developed which can pose a high risk in damage to the mothers spin and pelvic bone. The mother is also more likely to have a premature baby with a low birth weight. With all this in mind, is there an appropriate age to have a baby? If one accidently becomes pregnant, is the mother posing a risk for their baby?
I chose this topic for my paper because it is something all women thinking about pregnancy need to consider. In society it is expected for women to wait until they are married and are financially stable to consider having a baby. If the women isn’t “fully prepared” to have the baby until their late 30’s to 40’s, is it the smartest decision? Also, teen’s that accidently become pregnant and aren’t fully developed, is having the baby the best decision? No mother would want to pose a risk for their baby.

fragments:
1.While she was getting ready in the morning. The student realized she had a paper due.
(ic,dc) The student realized she had a paper due, while she was getting ready in the morning.
2.The party was fun. Because of the DJ.
(dc,ic) Because of the DJ, the party was fun.
3. Game ended with an unfair call.
(+,-) The game ended with an unfair call.

run-ons:
1. I woke up early this morning the dog had to go out.
(.) I woke up early this morning. The dog had to go out.
(,cc)I woke up early this morning,for the dog had to go out.
(;) I woke up early this morning; the dog had to go out.

Nam Luu said...

Nam Luu
English 60
Cypress

Mr. Hsiao I think I am going to change my subject. I was given some hours to work this weekend finally by my company and it was a teacher/community conference event for social advocates, teachers, and community members of Carson and other south bay communities. One of the issues discussed that really hit me was one about how schools would immediately evaluate problematic kids, or kids who seem to have dysfunctional families at home and automatically label them ass adhd, or emotionally distressed just to get rid of the kid and enroll them into special education. Some of the parents of these kids do not speak much english or have proper understanding of these procedures and they let the district do what they do because they think the school knows best. The worst part of it all is that most of these evaluated and labeled kids don't come from dysfunctional families, or are emotionally distressed. They just lack guidance at home due to cramped poverty level households, or their parents just are misguided and misinformed of how the school system works. It is an easy cop out to just remove these kids and put them in programs that they are way far more excelled for then they are, but just lack the motivation and guidance to do so. I don't know what the issue is called or what my title is but I am going to see what I can do.

I might even change the subject 2-3 more times before the final. I can't put my best work into something unless I know its for an informative cause, or if I don't have enough solid information about the issues to accurately represent and speak on the issue. I can't just write about some random topic and put my best into it. My brain will not comprehend with my motivation that then leads to asdf & jkl;

Nam Luu said...

Oh and for those that are 21+

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Give us some Boo Yahs. We need higher ratingssss!

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Music Links

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(Brand New Myspace Layout & New Music)
http://www.theaudiblemainframe.com
(Website for booking)

Book us if you like us. Parties, charity events, clubs, venues, or even your birthday. Give us a nice PA some booze and bob and your good.

DOOJIN said...

Doojin Chang
English 52
Cerritos College

My topic chosen for research is gang life. People who are in the gang life do not exist only United State, but also in China, Japan, and Korea. They are in everywhere in the world. They do not live stable or safe life as normal people live. In fact, there could be many reasons why they became gang members. They have not usually received good education, and have not had family support. They were in poverty from their parents before joined the gang. Some of them do not have a job, so they do not have certain income. It cannot give them good life because they need to do something wrong, or do something what they do not what to in order to get some money. What the motivation for this research is I am sometimes wondering why they are in gang life even though they know it is not good for their life, and what the way to live legally. After some research, I realized it is very hard to get out of gang life, and there is some reason why they need to be there. I am curious what makes them stay in the gang life. I have done this topic on the debate. Our team was con for gang life, and I have already found out some information from website. There are a lot of information on website and books. Information from personal experiences and the gang community website will be helpful for research. Especially, in L.A, there are a lot of gang organization and gangsters such as Mexican gangs, Chinese gangs, and American gangs. And, there are good information about gangster’s emotions, attitudes, and goal from the books.

DOOJIN said...

Doojin Chang
English 52
Cerritos Collge
H/W

Run-on
No one can go to any canyons near Yorba Linda there are smokes and the fires.

1. No one can go to any canyons near Yorba Linda, there are smokes and the fires.
2. No one can go to any canyons near Yorba Linda. There are smokes and the fires.
3. No one can go to any canyons near Yorba Linda; There are smokes and the fires.

Fragment
I couldn't go home. By the fires.

1. I couldn't go home by the fires.
2. By the fires, I couldn't go home.
3. I couldn't sleep at home because of the fires.


I live in Brea, and the fires were getting worse yesterday. So, I slept in my friend's home in Downey. Fortunately, the fire is almost gone from Brea.

A road of memories said...

Teenage pregnancy can either be accepted or denied, but most of the mortal issues that teenage pregnancy is inappropriate. Kids at teen ages should focus more in school and their social life rather than settle down at the early age. Teenage pregnancy is defined as a teenage or underage girl is usually within the ages of 13-17, becoming pregnant. Teenage pregnancy faces many of the same obstetrics issues as women in their 20s and 30s. Most of the problems they will face are sexual abuse, childhood environment, impact on the mother, child and families members, teenage fatherhood, contraception, age discrepancy in relationships, and socioeconomic factors. These are the common factors affect teenage pregnancy plus majority people disagree with teen pregnancy. On the other hand, there are a few of the beneficial outcomes toward teen pregnancy. Because teenagers’ organs are in the process of development, if a teenager gives birth, a fetus will absorb more nutrition, yet the fetus will not be defected. There are good intentions to have baby at the early age whereas reproduce will be highly successful, but others personal issues they will have to face. In addition, for teenage mothers with low-income, there is an organization to help with medical and others health issues.
Mortal issues agree and accept that middle age women are and should be able to have kids at their age. Because women at the middle age are stable with their financial and career, and they are able to take care of their child. Middle age women are able to financially support their child educationally and educate well discipline to their kids. With other social issues, middle age mother will not have to face. But at the down side, middle age women will have a high potential to give a defect fetus. Most of the baby will either bear with different kind of syndrome such as curl on the fifth finger or extra meat near the earlobe. Although middle age women are stable in their socioeconomic and be able to provide education for their kids, they will have to spend their money for medical and Medicare purposes for their defect fetus. There are upside and downside for middle age pregnancy. Of course middle age women will be able to maintain a happy family, but the chances of having a child at the age of 40s are at risk of having an unhealthy baby.

A road of memories said...

IT's SUNday night! every one, and tomorrow is monday. We are all going to meet again. I hope everyone has the most wonderful weekends spending your time with family, friends, and love one. so the fun is out, the work is back, if we party hard, we all gonna have to work hard! I hope everyone will have a happy monday!!! (*_*)

Gerardo!! said...

Gerardo Rodriguez
cerritos

3 ways to fix run ons and fragments

.
he swam in the ocean with the dolphins. he also met nemo.

,cc
he swam with shamoo, and also rubbed his belly.

;
he went sky diving; his girl friend wet her pants while jumping.

fragments
dc,ic
he is gangster, and also a well educated man with a masters degree.

ic dc
she is cool if she jumps from the rooftop into the pool.

add/sub by deletion dc-ic
i ran like a cheetah with my new nikes that were cool from finish line.

Cianna said...

Cianna Calandrino
English 100
Golden west

Run-ons:
Some people love country music I really love country music.
1. music. I really
2. music, but I really
3. music; I really

fragments:
I love bowling I bowl all the time.
1.I love bowling,I bowl all the time.
2.I bowl all the time. I love bowling.
3.I love bowling all the time.

Araceli Garcia said...

ARACELI GARCIA
ENGLISH 52

MY PROPOSAL


WELL EVERYBODY LAUGHED AT ME WHEN I INTRODUCED MY PROPOSAL IN CLASS.... INCLUDING MR.H! SO THANKS... LOL BUT I AM SURE ITS A TOPIC U RARELY READ ABOUT MR.H SO I HOPE U FIND IT INTERESTING. ANYWAY MY RESEARCH IS GOING TO BE ABOUT LIFE BEYOND US,ABOUT GALACTIC CIVILIZATIONS.IN EASIER TERMS ABOUT ALIENS AND UFO'S . MANY HUMANS LAUGH AT THIS, AND TEND TO BE VERY SKEPTICAL ABOUT THIS TOPIC. I AM NOT STATING THAT THEY EXIST, BUT I AM VERY OPEN MINDED AND I WILL TAKE IT INTO CONSIDERATION. THE IMPOSSIBLE IS POSSIBLE. THAT IS FOR SURE.I FIND THE THOUGHT OF ALIENS NOT EXISTING QUITE SELFISH.HOW CAN WE LIVE ON EARTH THINKING THAT WE ARE THE SUPERIOR SPECIES, AND THAT ONLY WE EXIST.THE GALAXY IS ENDLESS, AND WHO KNOWS WHAT IS OUT THERE.THEY CAN BE WATCHING US! I DONT WANT PEOPLE TO PICTURE ALIENS LIKE E.T. AND THE CARTOON VERSIONS. WHEN I SPEAK OF ALIENS, I AM REFERRING TO WHATEVER LIFE EXISTENCE IS OUT THERE. WE ARE ADVANCED IN OUR TECHNOLOGY, BUT NOT TO THE POINT WHERE WE CAN DISCOVER ALL THAT IS OUT THERE IN THE UNIVERSE. WE WILL NEVER FULLY KNOW WHAT IS OUT THERE, AS WELL AS WE WILL NEVER EXACTLY KNOW HOW WE CAME ABOUT. IT IS ALL A MYSTERY HERE ON EARTH AND IT IS EVEN A GREATER MYSTERY OUT IN THE UNIVERSE. I WANT TO RESEARCH ON ALL THE CASES THAT PEOPLE CLAIM THEY HAVE SEEN UFO'S OR ALIENS.I ALSO WANT TO DIG IN MORE INTO THE GOVERNMENTS INVOLVEMENT WITH ALL THESE MYSTERIES. IT IS SAID THAT THE GOVERNMENT IS KEEPING THE WHOLE ALIEN THING TOP SECRET. THIS COULD BE A POSSIBILITY, MAYBE TO KEEP FOR THEMSELVES THE ADVANCED TECHNOLOGY.ONE WILL NEVER KNOW. SO I HOPE TO FIND MANY INTERESTING ARTICLES ABOUT THIS AND I GOT THE DISCOVERY AND HISTORY CHANNEL. :)

cathrina86 said...

Cathrina Afusia
Cerritos College
English 52
Run on and Fragment excercise

To be successful in Mr Hsaio's class you must study.

DC,IC- To be successful in Mr Hsaio's class, you must study.

IC DC You must study to be successful in Mr. Hsaio's class.

Love is not something that just happens love is something that is created.
(.) Love is not something that just happens. Love is something that is created.
(,cc) Love is not something that just happens, for love is something that is created.
(;) Love is not something that just happens;love is something that is created.

Thomas Rios said...

Thomas Rios
Professor Hsiao
English 100
12 November 2008
Homelessness
What is the definition of homeless? The definition, according to the US Department of Housing and Urban Development website, is an individual who lacks a fixed, regular, and adequate nighttime residence. Also, an individual who has a primary nighttime residence that is either a supervised publicly or privately operated shelter designed to provide temporary living accommodations. I think that this issue must be given attention because after going to the Isaiah House, I see how close many people could come to being homeless. In an economic crisis, I think we must be especially cautious. My motivation for doing this research is that I have always been interested in giving a helping hand. By revealing some of the obvious issues, maybe I can formulate a solution, or try to be part of one. I will focus more specifically on the growing numbers of homeless families and the effects it has the child’s development. It is so sad that people can be pushed to the point of homelessness. Whole families can fall victim to it and the children, having no other choice, are dragged in. I am going to choose the cause and effect style of organizing the paper. I have given though to it and I think that will be the easiest way to organize the paper efficiently. I have started looking on the internet to make sure that I will be able to fill six pages with relevant information. Finding the research should not be hard; there are many studies done that I have found on the internet. I also have the end notes where countless resources are listed if I should not be able to find ample resources. I have found that homelessness affects a child’s development in many ways. It creates many emotion difficulties that the child faces at a very young age. Generally, homeless children have more health problems than poor children who have housing. It is just a very sad situation and I hope to shed some light on the issues that I believe are most important.

Ways to fix run-on: (.)(;)(,cc)
Run-on: The sky is black the air is filled with smoke.
Ways to fix it
1. The sky is black. The air is filled with smoke.
2. The sky is black; the air is filled with smoke.
3. The sky is black, so the the air is filled with smoke.

Ways to fix Fragment: DC,IC IC DC (+ or -)
Fragment: Although the ash is still smoldering. The fire looks contained.
Ways to fix it:
1. Although the ash is still smoldering, the fire looks contained.
2. The fires looks contained although the ash is still smoldering.
3. (minus Although) The ash is still smoldering. The fire looks contained.

mikey said...

Mikey Olson
English 60
Cypress College
Post #10?


Run-On:
Domo is a strange creature he looks like a brownie.

1.Domo is a strange creature, and he looks like a brownie.
2. Domo is a strange creature; he looks like a brownie.
3. Domo is a strange creature because he looks like a brownie.

Fragment:
My keyboard repeatedly falls of the table. Because I move when I type.

1. My keyboard repeatedly falls off the table because I move when I type.
2. My keyboard repeatedly falls of the table, for I move when I type.
3. I move when I type so my keyboard repeatedly falls of the table.

Aznwemsan said...

Wesley Lock
English 100
Cypress College

Proposal

Proposal
The topic that I will do my research on is teen pregnancy. The way I will organize it is either cause-effect-truth, or argue one side-argue other side-synthesis/truth argue your side. Teen pregnancy is something in the world that we as people should try to stop, but can not because it is becoming more common in society now. The number of causes to teen pregnancy can go on because the reasons for it are almost similar every time. What motivated me to do my research on teen pregnancy is the fact that almost everyone knows that having a baby in someone’s early teens is something that should not happen to girls in that stage in life. Also when conducting my research, pro teen pregnancy, I realized that almost all doctors and other licensed medical personnel agree that there is nothing good about it. Being on the pro side of teen pregnancy was not something I was proud to do, because I myself agree that teen should wait until at least their late 20’s or early 30’s. Possible sources that I will use are a couple of internet sources (for sure not Wikipedia), maybe a interview with the many doctors that know about pregnancy, or someone from a teen abstinence program, and EBSCO Host (after I find out how to use it).


Run-ons

EX: The sky was very blue yesterday it was really clear.

1. The sky was very blue, and it was really clear.
2. The sky was very blue; it was really clear.
3. The sky was very blue. It was really clear.

Fragments

EX: Although Bob lost. Tim was very happy.

1. Tim was very happy Bob lost.
2. Although Bob lost, Tim was very happy.
3. Bob lost and Tim was very happy.

Skagway said...

Its Zack

Run ons

1 When i get high i get high on speed(.) top fuel funny car's a drug for me.

2 He's the wolf screaming lonly in the night(, and) he's the blood stain on the stage.

3 Withought you, i am lost(;) i slip down from the toss.

4 If I didnt have you i would be alone(.) i would feel like a rolling stone.

Fragments

1 can you smell sarcasm on my breath if i'm a new age puppet strung out on death


1 if i'm a new age puppet strung out on death, can you smell sarcasm on my breath

2 If I die tomorow. as the min fade away, i cant remember if i have said all i can say.

2 as the min fade away, i cant remember if i have said all i can say If I die tomorow.

3 Tonight I saw your face up in the stars,
when I Stumbled here to paint you on my arm

3 I Stumbled here to paint you on my arm

Skagway said...

Zahary Duke
Eng 52
Cerritos College


my proposal is about the war overseas. The people in power han't been all that truthful. the deaths are more on both sides, the cost is more that we think, the theat of sadam, WMDs, and the way that the amazing soldirs act, feel and how people treat them when they get back home. It was and is a waste for our economy and time for everyone involved. It also weakens our security back at home. It is causing more pain; both physical and emotional. I know a lot of people overseas. Some wanted to go, others where forced to. There was a purpose in the beginning of the war, it was to find and bring Osama to justice for what he did on 9/11. But in our search, Bush (the 43rd president of the United States of America and the one that started this section of the war) got off track and went after Saddam. The same thing his father did in his Administration. Witch in the end didn’t cause a threat. The U.S.A went after the lesser of two evils. The thing that pushed me to do this was losing my cousin overseas. Then a week after that, I lost a friend. I was thinking what the hell is happening, what can I do to make sure no one else has to go threw this pain. So I thought of sending a letter to my state rep and I also helped promote how I felt about the topic by telling and present my views. After College, if everything goes well, I will enlist and go into the army. Just because I am anti war, doesn’t mean I don’t respect the brave men and women overseas ricking there lives for a nation they love and the families and friends they would die for.

solopan said...

Isaias Estrada
Professor Hsiao
English 52


3 Run-Ons:

1)Be intelligent practice simple living and high thinking.

* Be intelligent, and practice simple living and high thinking. [,cc]

2)Come with me to the transcendental world of being knowledge and bliss.

* Come with me to the transcendental world of being; knowledge and bliss. [;]

3) In dark days when my mind is derived in discontent my gut becomes an endless well of alcoholic content.

* In dark days when my mind is derived in discontent. My gut becomes an endless well of alcoholic content.


3 Fragments

1) Even if your not holy think of the creator when you wake and sleep.

* Think of the creator when you wake and sleep even if your not holy. [ICDC.]

2) As technology progressed everything became simpler but more confused.

* As technology progressed, everything became simpler but more confused. [DC, IC.]

3) When the night comes upon us with an essence of mystery and profound uncertainty.

* When the night comes upon us, it arrives with an essence of mystery and profound uncertainty. [Add]

Claudia said...

Ferrer, Claudia Marlen
Professor Hsiao
English 52
16 November 2008

High school dropouts are a reality in the cities that surrounds me and nationwide. One out of four students between the levels of ninth grade to twelfth grade dropout, but minorities rate is more than one out of three will dropout which give us more probability. It is a haunting reality that one needs to face so we can find a solution and make our students progress into becoming successful people in society. Dropout rates are climbing high and no one is willing to make an important change that will cause those rates to start dropping. The schools are doing nothing to help the students succeed and graduate but neither are parents and teachers. The school does not and the little money that they have they are not willing to spend the money in the right places. Teachers try and teach the children something before they leave their class they do not teach them enough for the children to want to continue learning. Parents need to work in order to pay the wants and needs of their children so it means parents spend no time or very little time with their children which cause the parents to be uninformed of how their children are doing in school. It is a triangle that we need to fix and follow in order to keep children in school and help them become people of good. After everyone is doing their part it is now the child that needs to put the plan in progress he or she needs to decide what career they want to follow and help them succeed and help them follow through with their goal. The only way all this can happen is if we all enforce this triangle that will lead minorities and America into a thriving future.

Fixing Fragments
Today an awful day.

DC,IC
Today an awful day, tomorrow will be better with clearer skies.

IC DC
Tomorrow will be better with clearer skies today was an awful day.

(+,-)complete thought
Today was an awful day but tomorrow will be better with clearer skies.

Fixing Run-Ons
Today was an awful day because of the fires causing the sky to be smoky tomorrow will be a nicer day, I hope.

(.)Today was an awful day because of the fires causing the sky to be smoky. Tomorrow will be a nicer day, I hope.

(,cc)Today was an awful day because of the fires causing the sky to be smoky, and tomorrow will be a nicer day, I hope.

(;)Strictly forbidden only the students who had Professor Hsiao last year can use this.

People if I am wrong please tell me so I can Fix it thanks.

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Adolfo Leon said...

ADOLFO LEON
ENGLISH 52
CERRITOS

RUN-ONS

I LOVE DRAFTING RETAIL CONSTRUCTION PLANS FOR LAKESHORE I FEEL GREAT WHEN I SEE THE FINAL PRODUCT.

1.I LOVE DRAFTING RETAIL CONSTRUCTION PLANS FOR LAKESHORE. I FEEL GREAT WHEN I SEE THE FINAL PRODUCT

2.I LOVE DRAFTING RETAIL CONSTRUCTION PLANS FOR LAKESHORE, AND I FEEL GREAT WHEN I SEE THE FINAL PRODUCT.

3.I LOVE DRAFTING RETAIL CONSTRUCTION PLANS FOR LAKESHORE; CONSEQUENTLY, I FEEL GREAT WHEN I SEE THE FINAL PRODUCT.

FRAGMENTS
THE FLOOR PLAN HAD WRONG INFORMATION IT WAS REJECTED.

IT WAS REJECTED, THE FLOOR PLAN HAD WRONG INFORMATION.

THE FLOOR PLAN WAS REJECTED BECAUSE IT HAD WRONG INFORMATION.

MY DAUGHTER WANTS TO GO VISIT MEXICO CITY THE PLACE WHERE I GREW UP.

MY DAUGHTER WANTS TO GO VISIT MEXICO CITY,THE PLACE WHERE I GREW UP.

Adolfo Leon said...

Dear Reader,

My final paper will include a study based on a compare/contrast and truth analysis about taxing the upper class vs. taxing the middle class.
Some of the topics will be include questions like
Why the Middle class is is struggling to survive while the richest Americans or upper class are almost free to peruse all their interests fully?
I’m also going to describe the big challenges that the middle class has to face when taxes are increased.
And why do the rich people decide ship jobs over seas rather than give jobs to our working force.
Thanks
Adolfo Leon.

brandon said...

Brandon
Goldenwest
Eng100
Post: IDK

Proposal: The american dream fails those who believe in it.

Rags-to-riches stories are often insightful and inspiring. Indeed they embody something America prides itself upon: the dream of wealth and greatness. Often fame and fortune cause us to look at our own lives as meaningless and unsuccessful in comparison. Not everyone can obtain the american dream, because it does not take into account those who cannot dream, and those who dont fit into the dream. It is an illusion, taken as a widely-achieved fact. But how acheivable is this level of 'success'? Like the stars in the sky, there are bright ones and there are those that are dim. The dream of any would-be star is to shine brighter than any others in the sky. It is a prepetual outdoing and ever-achieving motion until we all burn out.

brandon said...

Brandon

run-ons

chess is an old game it is still fun.

Chess is an old game, but it is still fun

Chess is an old game. It is still fun

Chess is an old game; yet it is still fun.

FRAGMENTZ

Although i've seen stranger sets. They make a lego chess set.

They make a lego chess set. I've seen stranger sets.

They make a lego chess set. Although, i've seen stranger sets.

because i like playing chess. I wish more people played.

I wish more people played, because i like playing chess.

I like playing chess. I wish more people played

brandon said...

Brandon
Goldenwest
Eng100
Post:IDK

Chris,

thank you for your unique perspective. But i think we should both quit while we are ahead.

JGreenroyd said...

Joshua Greenroyd
Eng 100
GWC
Post 15?

Proposal:
I am going to write my final research paper on proving Christianity is true. Why did I choose this topic? I chose this topic for several reasons. First, many people in this time try to prove Christianity wrong by using science, and other sources. Second, my dad is the Senior Pastor at Calvary Chapel Los Alamitos, and he knows a lot about this topic. Last, I have a few great sources on how to prove Christianity using science, and other ways that people usually try to use to prove it false. The skew I am going to put on it, is that I am going to prove it from a pure philosophical and scientific viewpoint. Nothing about they found Jesus’ body here, therefore the bible is true, and Christianity has to be true. I have a few books that I can already use as sources for this topic. The books contents consist of quotes from philosophers and scientists such as Aristotle, Voltaire, and Charles Darwin. One of the books is titled, One Heartbeat Away by Mark Cahill. I also have access to a sermon that a pastor spoke around the world. The pastor’s name is Lu Wing. He is currently a pastor, but in an earlier age he was a scientist. He worked on making atomic bombs, and other weapons of mass destruction. Lu Wing did this sermon I am speaking of on the topic that my research paper is about, proving Christianity and the Bible using science. I already have the idea for the paper set. I am proving Christianity and the Bible using science. The opposite side of the spectrum that I am proving wrong are the scientific views that people use to view the Bible and Christianity as false. I will compare these two sides, than contrast them showing how science proves the Bible and Christianity correct, and show the incorrectness in the other side that is trying to prove wrong.


Run-ons

I love pizza cake is also good.

1) I love pizza, but cake is also good.

2) I love pizza. Cake is also good.

3) I love pizza; cake is also good.

Fragments.

While I play baseball. I eat sunflower seeds.

1) I eat sunflower seeds while I play baseball.

2) While I play baseball, I eat sunflower seeds.

3) I play baseball. I eat sunflower seeds.

Air-E said...

Ariadne Gonzalez
English 52
Cerritos

Proposal:

My proposal came to me when i least expected it to come to mind. i was thinking about it so much and couldnt come up with anything until it sorta just came to me before i went to bed. anyway my proposal is on sexually abused children and my organizaion is issue->solutions->call to action/truth.At first i didnt think many people would choose this particiular subject but then two other people happen to choose the same one in our class LOL. anywho im coming from the defenseless point of view in a child. we all have solutions that are not doing much when the child is being hurt but "can help" afterwards, though it doesnt help much. i want to bring to light how the child can be prepared for anything like this and the call to action when we implement this idea.

Run-Ons

(.)
(, cc)
(;)

I am a stilleto lover I love peep-toe heels.

1)I am a stilleto lover. I love peep-toe heels.

2)I am a stilleto lover, and I love peep-toe heels.

3)I am a stilleto lover; I love peep-toe heels


Fragments
DC,IC
IC DC
DC->IC

Though i like to eat. i do not stuff myself.

1)Though I like to eat, I do not stuff myself.

2)I do not stuff myself though I like to eat.

3)I like to eat. I do not stuff myself.

Anonymous said...

shayne fontenot
goldenwest college
professor Hsiao
english 100
post #14

research paper proposal



Suicide
To these people life is not worth the struggle. Although devastating families and everyone close to them, suicidal people see their future as the end of the line. Individuals often tend to look at these people as if they strayed off from the majority. The causes of these suicides are often connected in some way to each other. Suicides revolve around the culture they were brought up in, their class in society, and their families. Ignorant people do not see these helpless individuals as a group. If there will be any reduction on suicides, people must look at how these cases relate to one another. The image itself of one with the feeling of nothing to live for is absolutely terrifying. It breaks my heart to think that this can be overlooked so easily as if it was all a big misunderstanding. There is a cause for every effect. If people just take the time to find the cause for all of this, many beautiful lives could be spared. One cannot even imagine all of the heartbreak could be spared. To solve the unsolvable I will start off looking up specific cases of suicides and will begin to look at similarities. Once I find a connected cause, I will then search for a solution. Books, news articles, interviewing, and the internet will assist me in the process of finding an answer. Suicides will no longer be overlooked as if it was an embarrassment to urban life, but recognized as a sociological problem. Only when this is done, can we really stop this vicious cycle.

Anonymous said...

so i'm writing my research project on gay rights and probably almost everything involving gay life. So far and sadly i have a paragraph. I thought maybe i can get more effort if i have some help since most this subject is highly categorized in the opinions section rather than plain facts.

So if anyone is like also writing the same subject, email me at treehuynh@yahoo.com THANK YOU ^__^.

PLZ DON'T SPAM becuz u're a hater -__-. it's just rude...

Anonymous said...

also, i prefer emailing instead of just commenting becuz:

1. i don't really wanna read the comments, it takes too long to read it, no offense or antying so yeah.

Anonymous said...

shayne fontenot
goldenwest college
english 100
professor Hsiao
post #15
run-ons and fragments

ex 1. Although it slowed down. the fire kept on burning.

1) although it slowed down, the fire kept burning.
2)the fire kept burning although it slowed down.
3)the fire slowed down. the fire kept burning.

ex2. the winds grew vicious over the next few days homes all of were destroyed.

1) the winds grew vicious over the next few days. homes all over were destroyed.
2) the winds grew vicious over the next few days; homes all over were destroyed.
3) the winds grew vicious over the next few days, and homes all over were destroyed.

Alisa Watson said...

Alisa Watson
English 100
GWC
Post 11...
Proposal- Prop 8
Prop eight is about whether or not gay marriage should be legal or illegal. Californians had already passed another law saying that gay marriage should be illegal. I believe that prop was prop twenty-two. After prop twenty-two passed it was taken to the California Supreme Court where it was over turned. Allowing homosexuals the right to get married has been denied twice in an open election to everyone who can vote. I am for gay marriage. I believe that people have the right to do whatever they please as long as they are not hurting anyone else. We, as the people under the constitution, have certain rights and I believe that prop eight is taking those rights away from people. However, I do see why people do not want to allow homosexuals to get married. Marriage is a very religious thing. Marriage is confirming, in front of God, that those two people love each other and will be with each other their entire life. In the bible it states that marriage is between a man and a women, and have two people of the same sex get married goes against this. I believe if the people of California do not want to allow gay marriage they should at least allow civil union more rights. Civil union is similar to marriage except it does not have all the same rights or the religious title of “marriage”. Not allowing someone to do something based on their race, religion, or whom they love is not what this country is about. The Untied State’s has gone through a lot. It has now the rights for black people, women, and hopefully one-day homosexuals. We have come so far in the last 100 years from having slaves to having a black president. We have had woman with no rights to woman becoming huge corporate leader. One day we will have it so everyone has equal rights and a fare opportunity. This is the land of the free, lets keep it that way.



Fragment:
Although ice cream is good. Frozen yogurt is amazing.

1) Although ice cream is good frozen yogurt is amazing.
2)Frozen yogurt is amazing, although ice cream is good.
3)Ice cream is good. Frozen yogurt is amazing.

Run-on:
I love my phone it breaks easily.

1) I love my phone, but it breaks easily.
2) I love my phone. It breaks easily.
3) I love my phone; it breaks easily.

Yue said...

Yue Hayes
English 100
GWC
Post #60

I don't like posting before class, but at least I'm posting, I guess?

Issue
Negative effect of these things in the upbringing of the child.
..influences of the parents
..influences of the environment
..influences of unique events (such as divorce, learning a second language, abuse, etc.)

Solution
..What the parents can do for their child
..What the child can do as they grow up
..The various help that they may get to get out of this (psychiatric, school, etc.)

Call to action
..When I become the parent, what will I do?
..In what ways will I be able to better my life, going through these things?

-------------------------
It's difficult to write a fragment and a run-on because I try so hard to avoid them. ahah... It pains me to post both of them at the same time!! :P

Run-on
Gabriel and I are going to have a cookie face-off I'm scared. (haha)

1. (.) Gabriel and I are going to have a cookie face-off. I'm scared.
2. (,cc) Gabriel and I are going to have a cookie face-off, and I'm scared.
3. (;) Gabriel and I are going to have a cookie face-off; I'm scared.

Fraggles
Because she [Jovana] is super sweet. She will be the judge.

1. DC, IC: Because she is super sweet, she will be the judge.
2. IC DC: She will be the judge because she is super sweet.
3. (-) She is super sweet. She will be the judge.

My sentences were about my love for baking cookies (as well as Gabriel's. Haha), and 2 of my awesome blogger buddies. :D yay!

G. Burns said...

Greg Burns
English 100
Golden West College
Post 25

Proposal:

For my final paper I plan on writing about street gangs. I plan on talking about what motivates kids to join street gangs at such a young age, I will state why police officers are not able to get a hold and crush gangs. I will talk about the bond of peopole for protection that sounds like a good idea but man has problems with how much power one could hold.

I lost the race, for i was too slow
Ilost the race; for i was too slow
I lost the race. For i was too slow.

I saw iron man today. movie was so good

I saw iron man today, the movie had a great ending

I saw iron man today i was loving the ending.

I saw iron man today. The ending was the best i have ever seen.

Stephen Reynolds said...

Global Warming Proposal

I am writing my report on global warming. In my research I will be examining both sides as to draw a logical conclusion based on the facts and not a biased opinion. There are many sides to every issue especially one as big as this. Up to this point I believe global warming is a natural cycle of the Earth but the information on that issue seems to be limited (although I have not really done much examining). The other side to this issue is that caused by mainly coal and gas emissions we have polluted our environment with co2 speeding the greenhouse gas effect and also opened a hole in the atmosphere allowing in short wave radiation caused by the sun. I would love to learn more about this issue and find out from a scientific perspective whether or not this problem is a problem caused by humans, or whether or not it can be fixed by humans. I will be doing difficulty level number 7 so that I may be able to examine both sides and give my information for both sides thus allowing others to draw a logical conclusion based on their own biased opinions. The problem with this topic will not be a lack of research like there would be if I was studying the separation of church and state, the problem lies in the extensive, biased, not scientific information forced down the necks of anyone interested in the topic. I want to use actual studies done by scientists. I will look at information of others as well but I want to be able to back that information up with science because as everyone knows and has heard, science doesn’t lie. My only concern, and something I must be conscious of (luckily I’m aware of the potential problem), is the possibility of gathering information and becoming one of those people who no longer listens to others. I don’t want to inflict my opinion upon others I just want to humbly help them see my side in order to create diversity and an acceptance for others’ opinions and persons.

Amber Fontenot said...

Amber Fontenot
English 100
Golden West College

Proposal:
Taxing the Poor vs. Taxing the Rich

Issue:
- People living in the poverty level often depend on government funded programs, such as Welfare, but do not pay their taxes.
- Those living in the upper-middle and high classes should not be responsible for taking the burden off of the individuals living in the poverty level.

Solution:
- Force those on government funded programs to look for a job, until one is obtained.
- Progressive tax.


Run-on: (.) (,cc) (;)
My mother is out of town she is on a business trip.

1) My mother is out of town. She is on a business trip.
2) My mother is out of town, for she is on a business trip.
3) My other is out of town; she is on a business trip.


Fragment: (DC, IC) (IC DC) (Subtraction by deletion)
Because the fires are emitting smoke. It is hard to breathe.

1) Because the fires are emitting smoke, it is hard to breathe.
2) It is hard to breathe because the fires are emitting smoke.
3) The fires are emitting smoke. It is hard to breathe.

Stephen Reynolds said...

Run-ons
Life will go on without you whether or not you like it so live life to its fullest.
• Life will go on without you whether or not you like it. Live life to its fullest.
• Life will go on without you whether or not you like it; live life to its fullest.
• Life will go on without you whether or not you like it, so live life to its fullest.
Fragments
As soon as one would try to disrupt the government and initiate it. A group would rise against the government and thus anarchy would not be possible.
• As soon as one would try to disrupt the government and initiate it, a group would rise against the government and thus anarchy would not be possible.
• A group would rise against the government and thus anarchy would not be possible as soon as one would try to disrupt the government and initiate it.
• One would try to disrupt the government and initiate it. A group would rise against the government and thus anarchy would not be possible.

Danyelleyvonne said...

Thomas Danielle
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Fragments

Although I wish it did. Money does not grow on trees.

(+/-)
Money does not grow on tress and I wish it did sometimes.

(DC,IC)
Although I wish it did, money does not grow on trees.

(IC DC)
Money does not grow on tress although I wish it did.

Run-Ons

I went to the mall last night to buy Christmas gifts I was able to get all of my shopping done in two hours.

(,cc)
I went to the mall last night to buy Christmas gifts, and I was able to get all of my shopping done in two hours.

(;)
I went to the mall last night to buy Christmas gifts; I was able to get all of my shopping done in two hours.

(.)
I went to the mall last night to buy Christmas gifts. I was able to get all of my shopping done in two hours.

keveenfullaway said...

Kevin Fullaway
English 60
Cypress College

Run-ons

I do not like writing fragments and run-ons its annoying because I never remember the last way to fix them.

1. I do not like writing fragments and run-ons. Its annoying because I never remember the last way to fix them.

2. I do not like writing fragments and run-ons, yet its annoying because I never remember the last way to fix them

3. I do not like writing fragments and run-ons: because I never remember the last way to fix them.

Fragments

Then I fell ten feet. After I climbed the ladder.

1. After I climbed the ladder. I fell ten feet.

2. I fell ten feet. Soon after I climbed the ladder.

3. Soon after I climbed the ladder, I fell ten feet.

adri said...

Adriana Saravia
English 52
Cerritos
post 23


I am Writing my report on Children that have been molesteded or raped, and this is some info that i found. The number of victims of childhood sexual abuse and molestation grows each year. This horrific crime is directly tied to the growth of pornography on the Internet. Studies conducted by the FBI have shown that pornography is extremely influential in the actions of sex offenders and serial murders. Further, statistics show that 90 percent of the predators who molest children have had some type of involvement with pornography. According to Charles Keating of Citizens for Decency Through Law, research reveals that 77% of child molesters of boys and 87% of child molesters of girls admitted imitating the sexual behavior they had seen in pornography they had watched. Roughly 33% of girls and 14% of boys are molested before the age of 18, according to the U.S. Justice Department. Nearly 2/3 of all sexual assaults reported involved minors and roughly 1/3 involved children under the age of 12. In most cases, however, child molestation goes unreported. Estimates are that only 35% of sexual abuse is reported. Kids can be frightened or embarrassed and many times do not say anything.

2complex 4 1dimensional minds said...

AMADOR DAMASO
CERRITOS COLLEGE
ENGL. 52


The topic I wish to peruse is the gang life, and its negative effect on the youth and society. I believe that this is a problem that plagues all of society and all walks of life. The effects of gang life leave the youth and community ravished and broken. As a former gang member I feel obligated to present both side of the argument, but still I know that gang life is completely negative. This topic is also of importance to me because I have seen many a life lost to the perils of gang violence. I plan on using a number of websites such as; LAPDonline.com, safeyouth.org, and violencepreventioninstitute.org. I also plan on finding as many reliable books as possible. I plan on utilizing the Escob Host program offered here at the school and possibly using an interview with an older gangster, or veterano. I plan to offer solutions such as; involvement of people in the community to stop gang enrollment, for lack of a better word. Also guidance of the youth by more experienced gang members, for in my experience I find that older members want the cycle to end. Also I plan to propose that if there was not a budget cut of after school programs, youth groups, etc. the number of gang members would rapidly decline. I find that in sub-urban areas where money is plentiful there is not gang problem, but in urban areas, where the budget cuts affect mostly, there are numerous gangs. Its time for America to acknowledge the children that is has thrown away.

adri said...

Adriana Saravia
English 52
Cerritos
post 24

Run on

I love my frineds Ilove my family more.

I love my friends. I love my family even more.
I love my friends,and i love my family even more.
I love my friends;i love my family even more.

Fragments

If i could fly. I would fly to Spain.

If i coulg fly, i would fly to spain.
I would fly to spain if i could fly.
I would fly to spain but i cant fly.

Chava said...

Salvador Lopez
English 52
Cerritos College
Run-ons and Fragments Quiz

Run-ons

Hard work pays off in the future laziness pays off now.

(.) Hard work pays off in the future. Laziness pays off now.

(;) Hard work pays off in the future; lazinees pays off now.

(,cc) Hard work pays off in the future, but laziness pays off now.

Fragments

Because I forgot to put on sunscreen. I got sunburned to a crisp.

(IC DC) I got sunburned to a crisp because I forgot to put on sunscreen.

(DC, IC) Because I forgot to put on sunscreen, I got sunburned to a crisp.

(+ or -) I forgot to put on sunscreen. I got sunburned to a crisp.

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

How to fix fragments:
1.) IC DC
2.) DC, IC
3.) ( +, -)
a.) Dancing is a form great exercise. Studies show.
a.) Studies show, dancing is a great form of exercise.
How to fix Run-ons.
1.) .
2.) ,
3.) ;
b.) I am a robot i love techno and dancing is my life.
b.) I am a robot. I love techno and dancing is my life.


I'll post my proposal as soon as i come back and get my lunch. hehe

Hope everyone had a great weekend.

ILY

Chava said...

Salvador Lopez
English 52
Cerritos College

Proposal

I was going to write about Designer Drugs such as LSD, Extasy, and other man made drugs. But as I did my research, I became more and more disinterested. I already knew most of the stuff I was looking up and that is probably why I became bored of that topic. So now I have deciced on a new topic which is Prostitution. Since I already found a book and a few articles on it, I will stick by it. I'm not sure whether talk about Prostitution worldwide or just limit it to California. I was inspired to write about this shocking topic because I live right next to the hot spot of prostitution, Long Beach Blvd. Every time I come home from either work or school, I would always see hookers on the corner in skimpy clothing trying to make ends meet. Although some may be eye candy, it is also sad and disgusting because some may range from being underage teenagers to pregnant women. Yes, pregnant women. Some would even get dropped off/picked up right in front of our house. It really makes Compton look worse. So why do they do it? Is it to support their drug habit? Is it to support their family? Or is it just for pleasure? I will find out the answers to those questions plus more, write about the origin of Prostitution, and find a solution to this atrocity.

♥ Ali-Boo♥ said...

This past week and weekend have by far been the hardest of my life. I feel as if everything is just going wrong. Why is that a two year old is in the hospital for an unexplainable deisorder Hemophilia. Its torture to this poor child and hurts everyone in the family. Why is that when you want someone so bad and give them your all, they dont want you. I just feel like everything is going out the window. SO many things happen in life that we cant explain. Its not knowing what is going to happen hurts.

My poor cousin walks in not knowing what is happening to him with bruises that are scary to look at but yet theres nothing i can do. I know it hurts the baby I see him suffereing. Seeing the needle in his chest as the doctors draw blood every hour. Doctors say he cant wear shoes because his feet are to swollen. This baby is only two years old. Seeing him refusing to take the needle is heart breaking and depressing.Why? Why does he have to go through this? What is going to happen. Yet there are no answers and again thats scary.

Why is that break ups are always so unexplainable.Why is when everything seems so good turns into something so bad. Its always to late for excuses and sorries. You dedicate the time you have to this person, but yet its not enough. Why is that at the end of a break up theres always the "thank you for this and that" and then say how you cant see that person hurt, but yet their heart is actually melting inside of them. Why is that the person never knows what they want. They want you but yet they dont. How is that possible!! So many things are going on that are scary. Its the fear of being alone and wonderng if that person will ever find out that what he had was good. Will I be there?

Not knowing the answers is by far the scariest thing. Life has its moments when you laugh and all of a sudden the whole world is silent. Those moments when you feel like wow this is really what happiness is. And then life hasa those moments when you question everyhting. That is where im at, I search for answers but find nothing.

Will Isaac ever live a normal life without sticking a needle in his chest everyday?

Will he ever realize how much his smile brought my life peace?

Anonymous said...

Jon Croft
English 100
Golden West College
Post #15

Final Paper Question:
How do you log into EBSCOhost? Is it my id number, or the login for MyGWC that I use?

Poem:

Angry down is side up town
Angry frown them will make down
Angry dread the raise will dead
There be will the Oysterhead

The fishy head no time for stranger
His hands rage of hate and anger
His back is front his up is down
The Oysterhead will skip this town

If stance happens to cross his path
Stay away from his awesome wrath
Disease will spread from clenched web hands
And then it shall destroy this land

Forest mushroom beware the patch
Has one forest the Grundersnatch
The Oysterhead will soon it beat
And indulge himself upon its internal organs

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

Anthony torres

To alicia (or how ever you spell it)

The reason these things happen is because they have to. In order to find these answers you may have to ask yourself, "why"? I most certainly wonder why all these children with cancer end up having cancer and why? Poor little children that are so innocent. They didn't deserve this! This is not the childrens fault, as long as they have hope......It is like Being jewish during the holocaust and wondering why? what did i do.


As for your break up, If your boyfriend doesn't have the balls to tell you why he broke up with you (or vice versa) he is nothing but a coward. If People say they don't know what they want, that means their heart is somewhere else. This had happened to me before, But that same person does not understand, maybe if they took a class with Mr Hsaio they will better understand other's situation. There are too many people in this world that only care about thier own needs and don't look at the other side of the story.....

You'll find someone better sooner or later, your ex(boyfriend) was a test for what not to look for in another, making it harder to find, but totally worth while when you find, you get me?

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Proposal
Cheerleading is a sport.

The reason I chose this topic is because everyone I converse with tells me that cheerleading is not a sport. When I begin to argue the reason why it is a sport, nobody seems to care. Being a cheerleader is not as easy as people believe it to be. First of all, to join the cheerleading team, one must meet all the requirements to make it past try-outs. Not every coach has the same requirements. The requirements for my try-outs where performing a perfect stunt, cradling our flier, catching her the proper way, smiling while doing all of this. After the flier is safely on the ground, the music starts playing and a dance is needed to entertain our crowd. The dance is not an ordinary dance that one performs on the weekends with friends; this dance has to be done perfectly. Every person has to be synchronized with each other, and every move you make has to be very stern and locked out. After the dance, one must run to the other side with arms to the side and a smile. Tumbling is the final touch to the perfect routine. The girls have to perform a cartwheel, round-off and middle spit for the big finale. Some people laugh after reading the only requirements to being in a cheerleading team. What makes a sport? Is a sport based on having a ball? Does having a field make a sport? Is being on Television recognized as a true sport? I will answer all these questions and prove my point correct. Cheerleading is a sport, and it should be recognized as one.

♥ Ali-Boo♥ said...

jovana i agree..power to the cheerleaders!! ...made me smile


Anthony ! You are by far the only person who has actually told me straight forward. I just cant explain all the anger and pain i feel. Its so ugh!! I want to scream and cry at the same time but that will show im weak. And all i have been hearing is be strong, be strong for yourself. Really i have no idea what that means. Im like so scared of being happy now because no matter what something has to go wrong! I dont understand. Thank you though for actually putting into words i can understand. I may not know you but really you are the only one who has set it down for me. Its not even me being against guys its me trying to say Why is that both sexes go through something like that. Wether its a girl or a boy they never know what they want! And my cousin i just dont want to see him suffer. I just feel like pain will never go away...

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

Anthony Torres
Cerritos college
post 1 trillon

Proposal research
What i have researched so far is:
Gangs have many things that anchor teens down to thier gang. For those needy teens that have no attention what so ever these gangs can bring them the much attention they need therefor Keeping that certain teen in that gang. Kids are also just brought up in gangs, rough nieghborhoods too play a key part in gangs.

Run-ons:
1)I went to the movies this weekend I laughed my behind off.
a)I went to the movies this weekend; I laughed my behind off.
b)I went to the movies this weekend, and I laughed my behind off.
c)I went to the movies this weekend. I laughed my behind off.

Fragments:
1)when someone takes too much drugs.one dies.
a)One dies, when someone takes too much drugs.
b)when someone takes too much drugs.one tends die.

I dont waste time on the bassline said...

Anthony torres
Cerritos college

Mr Hsaio, do we have to type our rough drafts? =]

SONNY said...

Sonny Karmokar
Eng 52
Cerritos College
Proposal

Football Players and Football in general.

My topic for research for my paper will be about the sport loved and played by many all over the country. Also known as the American Sport. Yes, I am talking about football. Football is high contact sport where two teams battle head-to-head (literally) to score touchdowns, the point system used, to win the game. Currently, there are 32 teams in the NFL (National Football League), which is an association created in 1920 by 11 teams. As the American Professional Football Association (the league changed the name to American Professional Football League in 1921 and then settled on its current name in 1922). It is divided into two 16 team conferences which consists of four four-team divisions. My motivation for research would be because of a reason for me liking the sport. Five years ago, I knew nothing about the sport. What I mean by that is that I knew it existed, but knew how it was played or how it had come to be. Later on the years, I had a god friend who got me interested in the sport. At first, I despised it because I knew nothing about it, but later on after going to games and reading about it on the internet, I found out that it was not that bad of a sport. I started watching it on television every Sunday, Monday, and Thursday. As I spent more time watching and understanding it, the more I started liking it. To me, the sport has become an everyday thing. Sometimes I really wonder how it was created and who was involved. My favorite team, the Pittsburgh Steelers, have been my team ever since that year they won the Super Bowl back in their 05-06 season. People now-and-then tell me that I say that because they won that year, but that is not true for I liked them way before anyone even knew they would be World Champions.

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Ali-Baby:

Sweetie to be honest i am glad this has happend to you. I know it sounds harsh and maybe there was another way around it, but either way i beleive it would have hurt just as much. You cant help who you love. i know how hard it is for you at this time to loose the only person you ever loved, but i think its for the better. you are a beautiful girl, and im glad this guy doesnt see it. You will overcome this and you will laugh at it in the long run.
I went through so much with my ex boyfriend. to this day when he calls, he tries controlling my life. i dont need him, i dont need his crap, and yes it hurts because i care about him, but i care about myself more than i care for that douche bag. He hurt me in so many ways, and i was so sick of it that i chose to live MY life the way i want to. I am so proud of myself for being in school, doing great in school, meeting new people, loving new people, and more importantly loving myself. worry bout you, and then worry about someone else, because someone else isnt going to worry about you. i learned that the hard way. i tried taking care of everyone and doing good even if it hurt me. then i slowly saw that i was taking care of everyone, when nobody took care of me. I learned the hard way, and im glad i did. Now im stronger and smarter. Remember, even thoguh you love him doesnt mean its forever. Forever isnt promised, and when it is ... its always over.
Now smile bby girl. You dont need a guy, especially as a freshy in College. Look at all the hotties around you. You are so young, live it up cause like i said last week,

You only have 1 life to live ... make the best of it eh ?

Love you baby girl.

Stay up.

and yes Power to the Cheerleaders !!!

nic9185 said...

Nic Root

Mr. Hsiao

Eng 60

16 Nov 08

Tree madness



Trees, Natures lungs are the life force of this world. There specific job is to transform carbon dioxide into oxygen for the use of all living things needing to breath. They are the rejuvenator of life; you can live longer then a week without food, even three days without water but only 10 minutes without oxygen. Throughout time, and many civilizations trees have been used for many things to create weapons, homes, furniture, and miscellaneous things. As time gets closer we realize that no matter what we try to do the tree is disappearing faster then ever before. The last known study shows that we are losing fifty-five acres of tree’s every hour and thirty one point one million acres a year. The reason for the disappearing of the trees is the loggers cutting off more then they need to. Now there are different cutting methods but the most feared by the tree conservationist are the clear cutting techniques this particularly style is favored by the loggers because they acquire the max amount of yield of trees by chopping everything down. There are other methods such as selective cutting and seed tree cutting. These are but a few of the better methods, but still will leave us with fewer trees then we will actually need. These arguments between loggers and tree conservationist have gotten extremely heated even violent. In a highly controversial documentary made in the 1990’s called “Rage over trees” people would get into fights over them one side saying we need to save them, and the other side needing to cut them down to preserve jobs and help society. Guns were brought out and threats have been made through the dedication of one individual in a certain instance involving a forest in Washington state George Atheya stood up for the trees and fought with what ever he could to save this small section of heaven. Just before it looked like the loggers were going to win this land, a man by the name of Bill Gates bought the entire land and donated it to the state to make it a national park. Therefore making it a no go zone for loggers. Through the dedication of individuals mountains have been moved and trees have been saved

Reality. The way it.is. said...

Brenda Velasco
english 52
cerritos college

Research Topic
My research topic is on the negative affects that a child goes through when the father is absent. A child needs more than just his/her mother involved in their life. Studies have shown that the majority of successful adults have both mother and father. When the father is absent, the child is more likely to either join gangs, or go against their parents wishes. I am researching the fact that the father chooses not to be in the childs life. More research still needs to be done on my behalf.

Fragments/ Run-on's

RUN-ON'S:
1. I want some ice cream I want some pie.
-I want some ice cream, and I want some pie.

2. I want some ice cream I want some pie.
-I want some ice cream. I want some pie.

3.I want some ice cream I want some pie.
- I want some ice cream; I want some pie.

FRAGMENTS:
1. She is in love with him. Beacuse her heart beats faster.
-Her heart beats faster, because she is in love with him.

2. She is in love with him. Because her heart beats faster.
- She is in love with him because her heart beats faster.

3. She is in love with him. Because her heart beats faster.
-Her heart beats faster she is in love with him.

CeJay said...

Carl Benons
Cerritos college
Eng 52
Post 1
3 ways to fix a fragment

I went to the park yesterday I saw a dog that look just like Scooby-DO.

I went to the park yesterday, and I saw a dog that look just like Scooby-DO.

I went to the park yesterday. I saw a dog that look just like Scooby-DO.

I went to the park yesterday; I saw a dog that look just like Scooby-DO.

Anonymous said...

Rachel Todd
Eng 100
GWC

homework:

I've not learned a lot, in these brief eighteen years,
About people and politics, and things that they fear.
But a few things I know, that some might not, is
How precious life is when more time can't be bought.

A few years ago, when I was about nine,
Our parents sat us down, mom said, "I think I'll be fine".
With tests and procedures and hospital stays,
Time began being measured not in years, but in days.

Growing up without my mom has been quite a trial.
For such a long time, I couldn't even smile.
I had to stay strong for my brothers and my dad,
My nickname "lil mama" sometimes still makes me sad.

Her memory lives on in my mind and my heart.
She's still with me in spirit, so we'll never be apart.

CeJay said...

Carl Benons
Cerritos college
Eng 52
Post 1

My research topic is about how music makes people feel. I am going to compare and contrast two different genres of music, and how the two style influence people.

Lily827 said...

Liliana Fierros
English 52
Cerritos

I dont have my proposal with me, since my computer in not working again. But my topic is depression, and what and how it effects teens. The fad emo is not only fashion but it is a statement, and an expression on how these teens feel. The dark clothing, the pitch black hair, and the thick makeup, and the music all take part on this depression and what some teens may call "fashion".

3 Fragments

1) I shop a lot. Because I get a 50percent discount.

- I shop a lot because I get a 50 percent discount.

2) With a purple dress. I have a pair of silver shoes to wear.

- I have a pair of silver shoes to wear, with a purple dress.

3) He have me for Valentine were beautiful. If the pink roses.

-The pink roses he gave me for valentine were beautiful.

Stephen said...

Stphen Lee
English 52
Cerritos College


3 ways to fix a fragment
1. Dc,Ic.
2. IC Dc.
3. dc -> ic dc.

3 wys to fix a run on
1. Period
2. comma
3. CC: ;

FInal paper propsal

For my final paper, i am doing a research about drugs and drug addcits. I am going to write about how drugs can just demolish someones life so fast and so easy. I am going to do a research about how and why quiting drugs are so hard and difficult and how people overcome their addictions.this is very intriging for me because i always wanted to know more about drugs and its addcits.

serenity40 said...

Shannon Flak
Eng 100
GWC

Rachel your poem was beautiful.

Question for Final paper...When do you cite someone and how do you do it. I know I have asked tis question all ready, I just don't know how to do it at all.

Here is my poem written about the paper I am doing


No Longer

Pain, guilt and shame
Insecurity, low self-esteem, no self-dignity
Have you ever felt these emotions/feelings?
After the abuser has laid their hands upon you

Being told it’s all your fault
If you would of just done what your abuser expected of you
Have you ever felt this way?
After the abuser has laid their hands upon you

Everyday you want to just run and hide
Where’s the drink, where’s the line
To take away the pain you feel
After the abuser has laid their hands upon you

I am strong, I am brave
Your cruel words, anger and violence
Affect me know more
After you no longer allow the hands of the abuser upon you

Beltran said...

Beltran Jessica
English 52
Cerritos College

Fragments

1)I failed the test.Although I studied.

(DC,IC)Although I studied, I failed the test.

2)According to my uncle. He said he was never going to drink again.

(IC,DC)He said he was never going to drink again, according to my uncle.

3)I cannot complete my homework listening to music.

(+/-)I cannot complete my homework while listening to music.



Run On's

1)I was very sad when my dad left to work to San Francisco I cried all night.

(.) I was very sad when my dad left to work to San Francisco. I cried all night.

2) This weekend I felt very sick I stayed home and watched movies both days.

(,CC) This weekend I felt very sick,so I stayed home and watched movies both days.

3)My math class is a short class it is only one hour and thirty minutes.

(;)My math class is a short class; it is only one hour and thirty minutes.

Beltran said...

Beltran, Jessica
English 52
Cerritos College

Proposal:

Childhood Obesity is a major problem that has been going on for years now, and will contniue to carry on in the future. Yes, it will continue but only if don't take action and try to prevent it.Obesity in children and adolescents is a serious issue with many health and social consequences that often continue into adulthood. This inspired me because of all the obese children and the health effects it causes. Some even drive their way to death.We can prevent that by getting information. I will be doing cause-->effect-->truth.

K. Liou said...

Kevin Liou
English 60
Cypress College
Post ?

Research Paper Proposal:

I have chosen the topic of obesity as my final research paper simply because it is a serious public heath issue amongst Americans in United States and how it has impact on our increasingly sedentary lifestyle. The definition of obesity is a condition in which excess body fat has to such an extent that health may be negatively affected. Obesity among adults and children has more than doubled, if not tripled in America the past couple of years. It is the second leading cause of preventable death after cigarette smoking. My motivation for the research of this topic are the people I drive on the road with, the people I attend school with, or the people I walk around this Earth with. All these people around me motivate me to conduct a research on obesity because the majority of these people are in fact, excess in weight. I want to be able to reveal the truth and how it can be prevented amongst us individuals and potential children so it will not lead to an early demise someday. The sources that I plan on using for my final research paper are going to be mainly personal experiences from individuals who are excess in weight. I want to question them about what lead them to their weight without being too negative on the subject of matter. Whether obese or not, I want to ask individuals how they maintained their healthy physique or others on how they let it fall. Other potential sources that I may use for this topic would be reports, statistics, or articles from either websites or concrete reading materials.


Run-Ons: (.) (, cc) (;)

"The sun is high, put on some sunblock."

1) The sun is high, so put on some sunblock.
2) The sun is high. Put on some sunblock.
3) The sun is high; put on some sunblock.



Fragments: (DC, IC) (IC DC) (+/-)

"I need to find a new roommate. Because the one I have now isn't working out too well."

1) I need to find a new roommate because the one I have now isn't working out too well.
2) Because the one I have now isn't working out too well, I need to find a new roommate.
3) The one I have now isn't working out too well, I need to find a new roommate.

Marlene! said...

Urquidez, Marlin
English 52
Cerritos College
Proposal:
My final Research paper is going to be about disadvantages of teenage pregnancy.
I do not think getting pregnant at such a young age could be a good idea.
My paper is going to be organize inthe Exposition if 3 different phenonmena. (economically, heatlh, and education)
Run-on:
My sister is happily married she loves the marriage life.
1.My sister is happily married. She loves the marriage life.
2.My sister is happily married, and she loves the marriage life.
3.My sister is happily married; she loves the marriage life.

Joanna said...

Joanna Valle
English 52
Cerritos College

Proposal

My topic for this final paper will be on cigarette addiction. People that smoke, I will write on how nicotine affects the body. Nicotine is one of the most addictive substances in the world and it kills hundreds even thousands of people every year. I myself smoke and I will admit that cigarettes are very addicting, at first you crave it and then it becomes a bad habit that one cannot spot doing. When one tries to stop it is a true challenge, one gets urges and they are very hard to control. I find the idea of being addicted to something that will eventually kill you very amusing.

DannyNguyen said...

English 60
Cypress College
Post ?

Fragments: Today I. Ate a sandwich.

1. Today, I ate a sandwich.
2. I ate a sandwich today.
3. I ate a sandwich.

Run-on: I ate a sandwich it was delicious.

1. I ate a sandwich, it was delicious.
2. I ate a sandwich. It was delicious.
3. I ate a sandwich; it was delicious.

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Funnyman said...

Tyler Carniglia
English 60

research proposal:
The topic I want to do my research paper is addiction to methafedamine. The issue would be easy to prove with the drugs powerful addiction at such a cheap price. That will give the perfect reason why anyone can get the drug. Also, how the drug is easily made, whether it be made from home in some shanty “lab”, or manufactured in a high quality faction in a different country then exported to America. Also the problem can lie in the type of high the drug will give you itself. What makes the high so fun and taunts users to come right back to it and be hooked on it, even after one use. Can also point out how the drug usually hits low income neighborhoods and stays there to rotten it from its core. Solutions can be the problem, since the drug is extremely potent and addictive. Solutions could vary from a half-way house, which is like a rehab center, but the people there are forced to go there as an alternative to jail so I could be not as effective. Even jail will be considered a solution for the drug, even though it could be very easily obtainable in the jail just like it is on the streets. Finding information for this could be very difficult. Of course I would use the two sources I have to, but finding a book on the drug itself that was published before 1980 could be challenging. Just for the simple fact that the drug was very low key at that time and did not really hit the streets until the late 80’s early 90’s. But most of my research will lie in personal interviews. People who actually experienced the drug that could tell me the power hold it has on its users. The truth behind the drug is down to a fact though. It first became known in WW2 with the Hitler’s “super” soldiers, and how the Nazi army itself would distribute meth to its soldiers to make them alert for hours and need less nutrients to stay alert. This is a very sketchy topic that is very personal to me, due to family and friends that are users or have been users.

Run-Ons:
The dog is very lazy he never moves.
1) The dog is very lazy. He never moves.
2) The dog is very lazy, so he never moves.
3) The dog is very lazy; he never moves.

Fragments:
The cat jumped very high. Although he has arthritis.

1) Although he has arthritis, the cat jumped very high.
2) The cat jumped very high although he has arthritis.
3) The cat jumped very high. He has arthritis.

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Its Paul OMG said...

Paul Cutler
Professor Hsiao
English 60
12 November 2008

Support
I am not very good at coming up with topics, but I know that I try my best when it comes to writing on them. To elaborate more upon the topic I have chosen, I have selected family and gang/friend support. Family provides positive motivation, such as convincing one to pursue higher education and obtaining a career. Family is there from birth and always will be. Family provides all that they can in order for one to better themselves. As the saying goes, blood is thicker than water. Although, what does one do when they have no family? What if one is growing up in the bad side of town, and has to fear for their life every time they walk home from school? His or her family are not going to be with them at all times; how will they get the protection they need? They turn to friends, gangs, or any help they can get to validate their security. Gangs, on the other hand, promote emotional problems. This could include killing people, witnessing someone one has considered and treated like a sibling get shot, and/or loss of touch with actual family and friends. Not only would one have to go through a more than likely brutal initiation process to get in, but possibly even worse to get out. The motivation that pushes me to write about this topic is the debate that my classmates and I recently had. I only had three minutes to say what I needed to say, but I feel there is still much left unsaid. I do not want this topic to be nudged away and forgotten; I will not continue to say what I need to say, but rather voice it out thoroughly and knowledgably through writing. As for backup topics, I was not able to come up with anything relevant to what we have spoken about in class, and I do not want to risk trying something else that is relevant to my interests without going over it first.

R/O & F

-Run-On-
Jack raced Jill up the hill whoever gets the pale of water first is the winner.

1(.) Jack raced Jill up the hill. Whoever gets the pale of water first is the winner.

2(,cc) Jack raced Jill up the hill, for whoever gets the pale of water first is the winner.

3(;) Jack raced Jill up the hill; whoever gets the pale of water first is the winner.

-Fragment-
Since Jack beat Jill in the race. He is the winner.

1(DC,IC) Since Jack beat Jill in the race, he is the winner.

2(IC DC) He is the winner since Jack beat Jill in the race.

3(-) Jack beat Jill in the race. He is the winner.

LEESUH said...

Lisa Nguyen
English 60
Cypress college

Run-On

The boy went snowboardng he broke his arm
1. The boy went snowboarding. He broke his arm.
2. The boy went snowboarding, and he broke his arm.
3. The boy went snowboarding; he broke his arm.

Fragment

Because he went snowboarding. He broke his arm.

1.He went snowboarding. He broke his arm.
2. Because he went snowboarding, he broke his arm.
3. He broke his arm because he went snowboarding.


My proposal was on Abortion but I guess Mr H. told me he has read many papers in the past about aborion. I changed my topic to Materialism in today's America. Materialism has been define in many different ways. It also has many effects on our society today. It connects with wants versus needs, happiness, or even defines personality types ect. My purpose of this essay is to prove what materialism has done to our world and how people are portrayed.

gcamara508 said...

Gary Camara
English 60
nov. 12 2008
cypress

The Given or The Chosen

We are all GIVEN a family at birth to love and be loved in return, but what happens when there are problems with our family? Who do we run to when times are rough? Most individuals rely on their friends, the people they have CHOSEN to love and be loved in return. However, there are many occurrences when an individual chooses a much
darker, less distinguished group of people. This group of people may lead to crime and injustice. These groups of people are called groups. I hope to gain further education on the similarities and differences between families, friends and gangs. Lets face it, we are taught as children that gangs are bad while family and friends are good. However, peer pressure from friends, and even family members, can lead to bad choices and mistakes
also. I want to learn and research more about why people enter gangs and what are they in search of. At this moment, I believe that individuals enter gangs for a sense of belonging because they may not have that with their biological family and their friends. I want to have two distinguishing definitions between a family and a gang. One person may believe that a family is their backbone to life, while another may believe friends and
gangs will be their backbone to life. Families want to see you succeed and become a strong person, but this is not the case in some friendships. In today’s day and age, we as a society rely too much upon our family and friends. I want to distinguish the consequences on relying on these groups. Bottom line of this proposal is to show why we choose the people we want to associate with in life and how we cope with the people we are given at
the beginning of life.

Run-ons/Fragments

Run-on.

I watched football all day there were some odd games.

1.) (.) I watched football all day. There were some odd games.
2) (,cc) I watched football all day, and there were some odd games.
3) (;) I watched football all day; there were some odd games.

Fragment.

Yesterday I. Watched football.

1) (DC, IC) Yesterday, I watched football.
2) (IC DC) I watched football yesterday.
3) (Subtract) I watched football.

Carinna Luvs you... said...

Carinna Martinez
English 60
Cypress College
Research Proposal

Teen Pregnancy
The topic that I picked was teen pregnancy against abortion. I have known a lot of people who had to make this choice. Many of my friends and family members had their children at a very young age. The reason I wanted this topic was so that I can understand what they had to go through for their children. Even today in society kids are having kids younger and younger every year. When they do get pregnant, then every young girl is asked, “are you going to have an abortion?” To me if they were mature enough to have sex at their age, then they should face the consequences. There are other factors though, like being raped. Now that would have to be a tough situation to be in, especially at young age. Then would the circumstances be different, would it be okay for the girl to have an abortion. That is a good point that I would love to research, to find out how society views this. Many girls have families with strong religious beliefs, does that affect their choice. If some didn’t have strong beliefs, then would they have had the abortion? My main drive for this topic is to understand what they go through, why they did it. A source I can use is my family and my friends because they had kids at a young age. I would also like to get views from society and see how they feel about teen pregnancy or abortion. This subject has always been a sensitive subject, people who are for abortion and people who are against it. Personally I am against abortion, the thought of killing a child just makes me sad. Those are the main issues that I would be looking more into on writing my final paper.

Patron said...

Jake Mueller
Eng 100
Cypress
Quiz run-on/fragments

Ron-on

I was going to post my quiz earlier my computer was not working.

1) I was going to post my quiz earlier. My computer was not working.
2) I was going to post my quiz earlier, but my computer was not working.
3) I was going to post my quiz earlier; my computer was not working.

Fragment

Although my computer was not working. I tried to blog earlier.

1) Although my computer was not working, I tried to blog earlier.
2) I tried to blog earlier even though my computer was not working.
3) My computer was not working. I tried to blog earlier.

Carinna Luvs you... said...

Carinna Martinez
Cypress College
English 60

Run-ons and Fragements

Run-on(by the way i suck at run-ons)

The dog is black and white he loves to play catch.

The dog is black and white.He loves to play catch.

The dog is black and white, he loves to play catch.

The dog is black and white; he loves to play catch.

Fragements

Because my car is red. It looks like a racecar.

Because my car is red, it looks like a racecar.

It looks like a racecar because my car is red.

My car is red it looks like a racecar.

Patron said...

Jakob Mueller
Professor Hsiao
English 100
17 November 2008

Inmate Rehabilitation and Release

I decided to do my research paper on the same topic that I did for the class debates. It was institutionalization versus rehabilitation. I will be proving how and why it is better to properly rehabilitate someone, rather than to incarcerate them. I am not saying that is a true statement for all criminals. Some people cannot be helped. I was not sure if this was the right topic for me, but since I already have a lot of the research already done, I figured that it would be better than starting fresh. I already have three or four Ebscohost articles on the subject. I will be returning to the library to find a book that can relate to my topic. I may look for something about prison overcrowding and how that dramatically increases prison violence. I may take a different angle and show how these rehabilitation programs help entire families. It will show how a lot of troubled kids have no parents because they are in jail. If they were put in a program and cured for life, then they could have a positive impact on their child’s life. By them being out of jail, it will save taxpayers millions of dollars that could be spent on more programs. It will save money. It will reduce our prison population. However, I am still not sure if this is the right topic for me. The first reason is that I do not personally agree with what I will be writing about. The second is that I do not know if the topic is too broad, or too narrow. I also think that it might be easier to write about something that I believe in, but for now, pro-rehabilitation will be the topic of my research paper.

brandon said...

Brandon
Goldenwest
Eng100
Post: IDK

Jon,

i enjoyed your poem.
"Disease will spread from clenched web hands
And then it shall destroy this land". Good line.

Gary camara,

i liked your 'given and chosen' concept. it makes a lot of sense.

Nam Luu said...

Nam Luu
Eng. 60
Cypress

Run-Ons

EX:Money is not the answer to happiness money is the root of all evil.

1)Money is not the answer to happiness(.) Money is the root of all evil.

2)Money is not the answer to happiness(, yet) money is the root of all evil.

3)Money is not the answer to happiness(;) money is the root of all evil.

Fragments

EX:I love music. Music helps me relax.

1)I love music, because it helps me relax.

2)Music helps me relax, I love music.

3) I love music it helps me relax.


CHECK OUT OUR MUSIC VIDEO!

http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=vids.individual&videoid=46188625

tristababbyyy said...

Trista Vega
Eng 60
Cypress College

Run-on
My day was full of stress my boyfriend always makes me smile.

1)My day was full of stress(.) My boyfriend always makes me smile.
2)My day was full of stress(, but) my boyfriend always makes me smile.
3)My day was full of stress(;) my boyfriend always makes me smile.

Fragment
Since he loves me so much. He always gives me kisses.

1) Since he loves me so much(,)he always gives me kisses.
2) He always gives me kisses since he loves me so much.
3)He loves me so much. He always gives me kisses.

Research Proposal
Effects of Media on Women
More and more women in today’s society are being portrayed in a derogatory way. Most of the reasons why women are portrayed in that way are due to the media and mainstream stereotypes. Through the centuries, women are looked down upon and are considered second class to males. Everyday more women are being harassed because of the lack of respect males give them. The media has a great influence on the way males look at women today. They are so called “brainwashed” to think and act a certain way toward women. The motivation behind my research is to inform many of the social issues today dealing with women, and to find a solution for them. In being a woman myself, I would like a change in the way we are portrayed today.

A road of memories said...

There are no disagreement contracts
But how could they punish me
For the way how I act

Calling me by many bad names
And they are telling me
That I should feel ashamed

Unfortunate me, a young single-mother
Struggling in life
No one seems to care or bother

A road of memories said...

Could i have two csse studies in my body paragraph to support my two topics for teen and middle age pregnancy? and for the references, are we going to provide two books, one internet, and one article? Thanks Mister Hsiao.

erika_m said...

Erika Martinez
English 60
Cypress College
post ?

OMG im so mad, i was practically done with my post, and them my dumb computer decided to freeze on me!! gah

Ive decided to write my paper on family support. I wont really be focusing on the family vs. friends support like the debate in class, rather on the effect family has on someone. Sometimes parents and family push you and advice you and what they think is best or you. Most of the time we dont really want to hear about it, and rather do it ourselves. In the end family want only but the best for us. I believe this paper will extremely meaningful for me since I have been going throught quite a lot lately. For once I will be writing about something that means a lot to me. It shall be interesting :)

Run Ons:
I was going to go out Friday night I have an exam Saturday morning.
- I was going to go out Friday night, but I have an exam Saturday morning.
- I was going to go out Friday Night. I have an exam Saturday morning.
- i was going to go out Friday night; I have an exam Saturnday morning.

Fragments:
It will happen eventually. Dont look for love.
-Dont look for love it will happen eventually.

Dont please others. Please yourself.
- Please yourself before you please others.

I went to the club. I dance a lot.
- I went to the club and i danced a lot


ok im going to sleep now! :) im so tired!..
8 hr shift at work today! haha gah!.

samantha. said...

samantha t.
english 60
cypress college

Research proposal.

I’ve known quite a few people who suffer from an eating disorder. A portion of them don’t even know what their doing to themselves. The passion for them not to eat could come from many things. That is the part that makes me interested the most. A person who is somewhat close to me suffers from an eating disorder. She’s constantly in a bad mood and always running around to shed more weight. I can’t do much to help her due to the fact she is an adult. Someone can only do so much before they back off. The desire to be thin or to lose weight I think draws its power from Hollywood starlets and the media. In a way it is a little sickening to see celebrities and their stick thin appearances. The unhealthy skeletal look does not look good on anyone.
I think it is important what eating disorders do to a person and how it changes them. Even if they do not know it, it affect the people around them as well. It is abuse of a body. It is more than just a physical part that takes a toll. They psychological part of a person is highly altered as well. Genetic and social roles play a part. Anybody could have and eating disorder. Through various components an eating disorder can form. Even though this may be true, you do have control. No one is alone. Help is available for anyone. I think that eating disorders are a problem that hide more than what meets the eye.


The 3 ways to fix a run on.
. , ;(we dont use that one though.)



The 3 ways to fix a fragment.
DC, IC
IC, DC
add OR subtract by deletion




i hope everyone had a safe weekend.

i feel for the families who lost their homes in the fire. =[

2complex 4 1dimensional minds said...

Amador Damaso
Engl. 52
Cerritos College
post #???
Poem

"THE ROSE DOESNT BLOOM"

HE TOLD ME THE ROSE ON HIS ARM DOESNT BLOOM ANYMORE
ITS NOT THE SAME AS IT WAS, THE WAY IT WAS BEFORE
IN THE SPRING IT WOULD BEGIN TO SPROUT AND GROW
IN THE SUMMER IT WAS IN FULL BLOOM, SO BEAUTIFUL
IN THE FALL THE COLOR OF PETALS WOULD BEGIN TO CHANGE
AND IT WOULD DIE IN THE WINTER, AND THAT WAS A SHAME...

kayla said...

Kayla Marley
English 100
Golden West College
Post 40

I must say hearing Mr. Harry Davids speak yesterday was so interesting. I enjoyed having him as a guest speaker and being able to ask him questions. I felt kind of akward because Chris and I were like the only two asking mulitiple questions. Hearing is life stroy and everything was great though. Mr. Davids really did show that tolerance is everything and that if someone goes without tolerance their life isn't going to be very successful.

=/ On the other hand, I was listening to Amador rap before class and he had said something about *^&@ the cops and he wish they were all dead. I felt really akward because hearing all those really mean things was something I've never experienced before. I know many police men and they are all really good guys. I would hope no one would wish death on them because they too are just like everyone else with a family and children. The only exception of police men is they risk their life everytime they get in that cop car not knowing if this could be their last day of living. I'm sure there is an explanation behind why Amador had said it though, so I respect that. I must say though, he was great at freestyling. I couldn't stop smiling because of how good he was!!! Especailly when people kept throwing out different words and he'd have to relate them into the rap. That class sure does look like a clost knit family. :)

I will write my poem later.

Thank you Mr. Hsiao for givng us such a great experience on listening to another Holocaust speaker.

Unknown said...

Amreen Ramjan
English 60
Cypress College

Since I am tired. I will go to sleep
1. Since I am tired, I will go to sleep.
2. I will go to sleep since I am tired
3. I am tired. I will go to sleep

I came back home fast I drove home
1. I came back home fast. I drove home
2. I came back home fast, for I drove home.
3. I came back home fast; I drove home.

Prison and Rehab
The topic I have chosen to write my research paper about is on Prison and Rehab. The problem that we are facing today is that many prisoners in prisoners are convicted of nonviolent crimes. Many people believe that by opening up more Rehab centers, we can put the prisoners convicted of non violent crimes and help them overcome their problem. However, many people believe that more rehab centers should not be opened up because the criminals convicted of drug crimes should pay the price for their action. They must deal with the consequences of their actions. In my paper I plant on arguing for one side, arguing for the other side, and then lastly, arguing my side. I plan on telling the reader why prison is better than rehab, and then why rehab is better than prison.

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BOO said...

Alyssa Rosario
english 60
Cypress


so i spent a lot of time trying to think of a topic for my final paper that would interest me. im not completely sold on the topic that i have chosen as of right now, but it will have to do. ive decided to write my paper on teen suicide. i will be using format number five. i will be giving the backgorund and statistics of teen suicide as well as many interesting facts. i will be writing my paper about the understand of suicide. as in, explaining what causes teens to commit suicide,the daily influences that play into there problems, and why they ultimately try to kill themselves. there will be much more detail and insite that will be going into my paper.i will also be writing about the ways to prevent and help teens to think positive and appreciate life and themselves.this is a topic that i will grow to find interesting. i will work hard and do my best on this paper.


fragment
With his bike. The boy left to his friends house.

a)With his bike, the boy left to his friends house.
b)The boy left to his friends house with his bike.
c)The boy left to his friends house.

Run-on
The little girl loves to jump rope she is very sad because she cannot jump rope with her broken leg.

a)The little girl loves to jump rope. She is very sad because she cannot jump rope with her broken leg.
b)The little girl loves to jump rope, but she is very sad because she cannot jump rope with her broken leg.
c)The little girl loves to jump rope; she is very sad because she cannot jump rope with her broken leg.

Chava said...

Salvador Lopez
English 52
Cerritos College

Sorry Mr. Hsiao for not coming to class yesterday. I wasn't feeling well physically and mentally and I needed some rest. It was the only one I missed out of this whole semester, but I know I missed out on a lot. Hopefully I'll be able to catch up. Why isn't there class Wednesday btw? My other two classes aren't meeting up that day either. What's up with that?

Anyways, I'm typing this post up because I need some help/feedback from everyone in the blogosphere. Since I'm writing my paper on prostitution, my question is, How can I approach them(prostitutes) and interview them without coming off as some kind of cop or another "customer"?

Also, are we supposed to blog a poem that we've written?

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng52
Cerritos College

Sal:
Sup buddy. lol hope you feel better dude. anyway, the way to approach the prostitutes would problably be to say, "just out of curiosity, if you dont mind me asking, what made you decide to be in this profession?" i think that would be ok ... or "ive always wondered but never been presented with the opportunity to meet someone in your profession. im what made you decide to go into your line of work" that's probably something i would say. i hope it helped =] and not your whole poem, just like 3 lines. And your poems(because there is 2) have to be 14 lines each poem. Not only that but you have to send them to your team leader, in your case Amador, by saturday or early sunday morning. (i.e.2am lol crazy bloggers)then you have to make your collage on Microsoft Word and send it to your team leader as well. the collage is a challenge for boys, so it has to be more than 7 pictures. be creative! =] it can be of anything you want. it can be about you, or your research. (like a picture of you and 7 prostitues on the corner of Long Beach Blvd after the interview) hehehe JK Sal JK.

i hope i answered your questions the way you wanted. <3

feel better

yen dao said...
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Anonymous said...

Luis Canizal
Cerriots
Eng 52

The question for my research paper is, "What has more consequences, drugs or alcohol?" and,"What are the consequences?"

Anonymous said...

Luis Canizal
Cerritos
Eng 52

Here are a couple lines from my poem:

One saw the happy person.
He was young and bright.
Truth be told,
there was a darkside
that no one seemed to see.
Help came when it was too late

oNe LoVe said...

DarlaAnne Aguilar
Eng 100
cypress
Run-ons & Fragments

RUN-ONS

Sally loved traveling in Italy she felt Rome was to hot.

HOW TO FIX:
Sally loved traveling in Italy. She felt Rome was to hot.

Sally loved traveling in Itlay; she felt Rome was to hot.

Sally love traveling in Itlay, but she felt Rome was to hot.

FRAGMENTS

Since it is windy. The trees have no leaves.

HOW TO FIX:

Since it is windy, the trees have no leaves.

The trees have no leaves since it is windy.

It is windy, so the trees have no leaves.

I hope this correct because i suck at grammar. See everyone in class!!!

Unknown said...

English 100
Golden West

how many quotes all together do we need to have?

how many questions do you recommend asking in the interview?


POEM~ ..SNOWBOARING..
When I step out into the snow
My face conceives a facial glow
As I strap on my bindings
I hear a sense of grinding

oNe LoVe said...

DarlaAnne Aguilar
Professor Hsiao
English 100
12 November 2008

Obesity in America

My topic for the research paper is obesity in America. I want to target how obesity starts with our children and passes on through each generation. I do not just want to discuss the complications with the diseases of obesity. My main focus will be on how it affects our society as a whole, such as why healthy food cost more then fast food. Not only will I focus on food cost, but how it affects the mind as well. For instances in some cases how does the mind play its role in over eating. Why do people treat their bodies this way when they know it is unhealthy in every way? My research will come from the three different sources required. I will spend a day at a public library researching my topic in books. I will also interview someone who might have personal and/or professional experience in my topic of choice. My professional would likely be a dietician and a physiatrist. Both of these professionals would know about my topic, but just on two different levels. I am still undecided on how I want to organize my research paper. The organization I am leaning more towards is where you state the issue with the solutions and then call to action/truth. However, I would like to do cause, effect and truth, which is a little less challenging. The reason why I choose this topic is because it is a major key factor in our society. Not only does it play a major role, but it also brings more problems to the surface in the obese person. Obesity is one of the problems in America that everyone knows about, but always never pays attention to it. It is like there is an elephant in the middle of America and no one wants to do anything about it.

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Isaias && Cely:

I love you guys! Thanks for everything! from the food to the friendliness, im so glad i met you both. I love you dearly and i hope we stay friends after the semester. && one last thing ...

Happy Anniversary
you 2 couldnt be more perfect for each other!!
♥♥♥♥

Chava said...

Salvador Lopez
English 52
Cerritos College

Thanks Jovana for filling me in. I'm feeling a lot better than ever from you know what. I'll remember to take note of the lines you gave me and use them. I was also thinking of creating a survey and going door to door(since I have some experience) and asking people to fill them out and give me their viewpoints about prostitution. Good idea, huh? Imagine I DO get a picture of me with like 8 chicks, I'll be like Hugh Hefner hahaha. I don't think the collage will be a big problem though. As for the poems, I've been carrying around a little notepad and writing random thoughts that just come and go. Most of them, to my surprise, are quite good. If you're having trouble with writing your poem, not just you Jovana, but everyone else, I suggest you try that technique. It helps. =D

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Sal:
That's a great technique sal. good job! im glad you did that. whoo hoo!! i wanted to throw one more thing at you, the poem does not have to rhyme. so thats a good thing


(sigh of relieve)
Its almost 5pm. 10 more minutes and im off of work, onto the 5 freeway with a lot of traffic, home for a quite bite to eat, then class at 7pm. what a great life eh!? =] have a great night everyone.

Peace, Love, Justice, Freedom, & Hope

♥♥♥

CapinCooter said...

My proposal

Issue
Animals are treated like inatimate objects and are not given the respect and humane treatment living creatures deserve.


Solution
I plan on fucusing on informing the public to the reality of their stituation and,like most problems, will suggest fighting for this cause by edcucating the people about about the issue. Here I will explain the reality of the present day situation and informing others of what they can do to change the situation.

Truth
What rights are animals given in our society? What should they be given and how can we fix the situation? We need to take responsibility for our actions and cruelty.


Obviously this still needs some working out professor H, but its only of a rough guide so far. .. .


Fragments

Because he went down the stairs. He fell and hurt his knee.

1. He went down the stairs, fell, and hurt his knee.
2. Because he went down the stairs, he fell and hurt his knee.
3. He went down the stairs; he fell and hurt his knee.
4. He went down the stairs. He fell and hurt his knee.

Maria M said...

Maria Castillo
English 100
Golden West College

Poem: Fire (?)

Every house has a diminutive amount of fire set on,
But nobody tries to set it off, children and others have fear.
Their eyes have the constant fear that the fire could damage
Their lives, and their dreams but it is not their fault
For they did not set the fire.

Question: Could the cause and effect part of the report be more than one paragraph?

Marisela said...

Marisela
English 52
Cerritos

Hey Ary did you delete your myspace? I wanted to send you a smg but it said you had deleted ur page. just wanted to see if you can send me some of the links you used for your debate topic. My e-mail is Misschloe_1929@yahoo.com Thanks!!...
Melissa I wasn't able to receive the info you sent me. Can you please try again? Thanks as well.

solopan said...

Solopan Estrada
English 52
Cerritos College

Jovana:
Thank you so much, you are so nice.
Of course we'll still be friends after the semester, you got my number I got yours. Where good to go. haha.

Salvador:
Great technique, I do that myself.
Its actually the best way to do it.
I write whatever comes to mind on anything I could write on or carve on, hahaha. Yep all of you should try doing this it WORKS. Sometimes I wake up in the middle of the night, and write[poetry lines] on any piece of paper I could find. In the end when you have all these writings every where, you can put em together like a puzzle.[Anthology]hint, hint.




Well here's a poem, that i wrote in between nights. [not what I am gonna present, I don't wanna give that away.]

*Three Years of Bliss

From the moment I open my eyes

I see butterflies

And colourful dyes

Deep beneath i see were beauty lies

It is inside your eyes

Your lips

Your thighs

Your wonderful why's

I could not ask for more

For it is you who I adore

Our love...Our love

Will keep us close

You are the one who cares

The one who dares

The one who flares

Fire inside my soul

Oh you make me whole

I love you so

solopan said...

Random....

Crystal Blue Night

.........The night comes upon us
With an essence of mystery
And profound uncertainty
Yet we come out of our caves
In search of happiness
And blissful activity
...............

Michelle Matson said...

Michelle Matson
English 100
Cypress College

Proposal
I would like to write my final research paper on Human Trafficking. Human trafficking is modern day slavery whose victims are forced, defrauded, sold, or coerced into physical labor or sexual exploitation. This is a rising global issue the general public is not educated enough on. Approximately 600,000 to 800,000 people (mostly women and children) are trafficked globally each year. I would like to write my paper how this effects us in our backyards and around the world. I believe so strongly in human rights for all people. A person’s sex, poverty level, religion, and country they were born should not affect their basic human rights. As the organized crime gangs profit highly on selling and slaving people, human traffic is growing at a sick rate. I will research this paper from many different mediums. Pulling information form articles published in Magazines like Times, and Newsweek. I will also use the Internet and EBSO Host for research. Although I know it will be a struggle, I will work on an interview with someone working for an organization actively helping to stop human trafficking, or maybe someone who has been trafficked. Human trafficking will be an easy subject to bring to light the problems it causes to social, economic, political, psychological, and spiritual effects on our world.

ChauV101 said...

Chau Vo
Eng 100
Cypress
Proposal and grammer exercise

My proposal is going to be about how hard it is for today’s youth to differentiate formal and informal writing. How dependent we are on technology and how it effects our writing and critical thinking skills. (i.e. text messaging or instant messaging) I will be giving statistics how on well we do on the assessments that are given out k-12 graders. (Star testing, exit exam, sat, etc) The reason why I chose this topic is because it is something that we can all relate to some point or another. The social unwritten rules that we have given by society and how it affects everything we do. Also how is carries over to our writing abilities.

Run on
This week the 49ners won their game they are my favorite team.

1. This week the 49ners won their game. They are my favorite team
2. The week the 49ners won their game, and they are my favorite team.
3. This week the 49ners won their game; they are my favorite team.

Fragments

Although I just ate. I am still hungry.
I just ate although I am still hungry.
I am still hungry. Although I just ate.
I just ate. I am still hungry.

Thought I would lighten up my blog with some spirit. Haha I went home this weekend and went to the niners game in SF. They had a store just for left handed people! They have pictures of famous people that are left handed and gadgets made especially for left handed people. Cool because I am a lefty. I bought a poster that had a quote by Albert Einstein. Who is also a lefty. It goes, " Out of clutter, find simplicity. For discord, find harmony. In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity.” I just had to get it. Ok well done with my little rant. Sorry if it was not as descriptive as Nick’s blog about his trip to the east coast. Haha See you all in class.
CiaoChau

nizzle said...

Nick Odierno
Eng.100
Cyp.

Proposal:
Issue:
•Methamphetamines
- Physical problems
- Psychological problems
- Friends and Family

Solution:
•Rehabilitation
- Rock bottom
- Steps
- Time

Truth/Call to action:
• Daily life
- NA meetings
- Online support forums
- Day to day battle

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**Run-ons**
1) ( ,cc )comma, coordinating conjunction
2) ( . ) Period
3) ( ; ) Semi Colon

→ Today was very tiring I am ready to sleep.
1) Today was very tiring, and I am ready to sleep.
2) Today was very tiring. I am ready to sleep.
3) Today was very tiring; I am ready to sleep.

**Fragment**
1) IC, DC
2) DC, IC
3) (+,-)
→ Though I didn't fall asleep. I am tired.
1) Though I didn't fall asleep, I am tired.
2) I am tired, though I didn't fall asleep.
3) I didn't fall asleep. I am tired.

nizzle said...

Chau,
I didn't know you were a lefty!?...hmm who knew? Glad you had a great trip. As you can see I'm really running behind on the blogs this week...

Bproffitt said...

Brandon Proffitt
ENG 100
Cypress College
Post: Quiz

Run-ons
He was convicted for murder his reasons were not good enough to get out of jail.
1. ...murder. His...
2. ...murder, and...
3. ...murder; his...

Fragments
The car wont start. Because the battery is dead.
1. ...start, because...
2. ...start because...
3. ...start. The...

Chava said...

I don't really write poems, just little bits and pieces, like one that hit me while I was mopping: "I'm hanging onto barbed wire, every move I make only makes things worse." Or another one I thought yesterday, "Home is in a padded cell, forever hugging myself." I guess you can already see my style haha. Poems don't have to rhyme either. I personally think poems sound cooler when they don't rhyme, as long as it has rhythm and it flows. Not putting down those that rhyme either.

Isaias, you got some major talent right there. I dig your style too. You should post some more stuff.

Elsa said...

Elsa Sullivan
English 100
Cypress College

Rosita is a beautiful fairy she is a trouble maker
Run-ons
3-ways to fix them
(.) – (, CC) – (;)
1. Rosita is a beautiful fairy. She is a trouble maker.
2. Rosita is a beautiful fairy, but she is a trouble maker.
3. Rosita is a beautiful fairy; she is a trouble maker.

Even though, she does not like to read her books, my daughter is very smart
Fragments
3-ways to fix them
DC, IC – IC DC – (+ OR -)
1. Even though she does not like to read her books, my daughter is very smart.
2. My daughter is very smart even though she does not like to read her books.
3. She does not like to read her books, my daughter is very smart.

Maripily said...

Maria Amenero
English 100
Cypress College
Post 2
Latinos and Education in the US
I chose this topic because the news are always talking about it. We always hear very high dropout rates from the Latino community living in the US. I am interested in researching what causes this. I want to know what the link between race and education is. I was reading that the Latino dropout rate is 3 times higher than the non Latino. I am interested in my community, and I want to know what is causing all this kids to leave in school. I am interested in knowing if there is a way to change this, and how people can help to solve this. I think this is a very serious issue that is not giving the importance it has. I think that if Hispanics want to be looked at differently, they need tools to succeed. It doesn’t matter if it takes them 20 years to finish school; they are still on their way to a better life.
I think as Latinos in the US, we should all try to help each other. I want to help and that’s why I want to be informed about the subject. Like I said before, “kids” are our future, here and everywhere. Therefore, if we want to have a good future, we need to have good kids, at least educated ones. We need to start with them, and pay attention to their needs and statistics available in order to do something. Something that is even more alarming, as time passes, the statistics are worst. Second generation statistics are worst than first, and third are worst than first and second. Obviously, there are measurements that need to be taken seriously and immediately.

Anna Caludac said...

Anna Caludac
English 100


Higher Education in Asian-American Suburbia

For the final research paper, I have chosen to do research on a place, as well as the associated people: Whitney High School in Cerritos, CA. This high school is my alma mater, and is one of the top ranking high schools in the entire country, if not the top. I am now a teaching assistant at Whitney High, and am very well-acquainted with the schools overall system, administration, mission statement, and curriculum.
Whitney High School has its very own culture: a cult of students and teachers with an unorthodox dynamic, who have the sole purpose of achieving academic excellence and prestigious titles. I plan to investigate all the phenomena listed in the guidelines—socio-economic, political, psychological, and spiritual. Such phenomena are the driving factors behind Whitney’s historical, longstanding phenomenon: the pressure of getting into a 4-year university. Not just a 4-year university, but a high-ranking one, such as USC, UCLA, UC Berkeley, or the Ivy League schools.
I have also noticed that many friends both inside and outside my social circle from Whitney, including myself, have moved back home from their first-choice university due to the fact that the decision they made at the end of senior year was a bit hasty.
Is it possible that Whitney High School has instilled within us social, sub-cultural mores that have caused us to be shocked by harsh reality and come back home? If so, what alternative do Whitney High’s students have when choosing their best fit college?

FRAGMENTS
Even though he seems arrogant. Kobe Bryant is an exceptional basketball player.
1) Kobe Bryant is an exceptional basketball player even though he seems arrogant.
2) Even though he seems arrogant, Kobe Bryant is an exceptional basketball player.
3) Kobe Bryant is an exceptional basketball player. He seems arrogant.
RUN-ONS
Love conquers all good is more powerful than evil.
1) Love conquers all. Good is more powerful than evil.
2) Love conquers all; good is more powerful than evil.
3)Love conquers all, for good is more powerful than evil.

Elsa said...

Elsa Sullivan
Cypress College
English 100

The topic I have chosen is about deathly drugs. The reason I have picked this topic is the simple fact that is causing families to be separated. I do not know a lot of information about this drug, but what I do know is that causes people to lose their families and their brain cells. I decided to research about this drug because I want to learn more deep information. Information about helping individuals who are addicted to quit doing this drug. Therefore getting information how to recuperate and how to actually make it happen is my goal. I know there are many families out there that were torn apart because this drug getting involved with their family. I want to be able to recognize signs, symptoms and reasons why so many people are hooked into this drug. For some reason, it seems that people who are hooked into it, kind of forget their families and kids. That is why I do not understand the power of this deathly drug. It seems important to obtained more knowledge on how to handle anyone who is addicted to speed. I lived with a person who was, or probably still is addicted to it, and to live in that misery was upsetting. I have a strong feeling towards woman who is going thru this because I was a victim of a person who used this drug. The kids who get to see all this complicated lessons are probably traumatize. This is one of my reasons why I decided to leave my husband because is not just my life that is in danger, my daughter’s life was in danger too. I have started doing some research, so far I have found three books that could be helpful, but I am willing to search at longest it takes to get my questions answer.

Maripily said...

Maria Amenero
English 100
Cypress College
Post 3
Run-Ons
• The girls played basketball the boys played tennis.
1. The girls played basketball. The boys plated tennis.
2. The girls played basketball, and the boys played tennis.
3. The girls played basketball; the boys played tennis.
• I love to go to the movies I love to eat candy.
1. I love to go to the movies. I love candy.
2. I love to go to the movies, and I love candy.
3. I love to go to the movies; and I love candy.
• I want to buy a car my sister wants to buy a bike.
1. I want to buy a car. My sister wants to buy a bike.
2. I want to buy a car, and my sister wants to buy a bike.
3. I want to buy a car; my sister wants to buy a bike.
Fragments
• It is a really nice book. Love in Times of Cholera
1. Love in times of Cholera is a really nice book
2. It is a really nice book, Love in times of Cholera.
3. Love in times of Cholera was writing in 1988, it is a really nice book.
• Because the water spilled. The computer broke.
1. Because the water spilled, the computer broke.
2. The computer broke because the water spilled
3. The water spilled, and the computer broke.
• Missy my dog. Likes to play.
1. Missy ,my dog, likes to play.
2. Missy is my dog. She likes to play.

Tim Rice said...

What is all the homework for gwc english 100? thx

Alyssa said...

alyssa wall
english 52
cerritos

so today has not been the best day of my life...actually it has been pretty bad. it all started by going to school to find out that i have a quiz on 5 chapters on thursday...and a test on 4 more on tuesday! and then i had math...which is just never good. then while i am walking to my car i get a phone call from my mom...it is about my little brother who has been having pains in his neck...and went to the doctor today. it turns out my 11 year old brother, jake, has a cyst in or on the bone in his neck...in a spot where if it breaks the bone he could be paralized. he has to get an MRI done on friday...and that will determine what they do to get ride of the cyst. the doctor said that there is a big chance that it will require surgery. my poor brother is scared out of his mind...and i hate seeing him like this. he has had such a hard year, and now the little basketball star is told he cant do any physical activity until further advised...that is like telling Kobe he is not allowed to play basketball ever again. he isnt even allowed to go to school. this year really sucks...i guess i am the lucky one...none of the bad things are actually happening to me...but i have to watch very close friends and family go through pain, loss, suffering...i dont know how much more of it i can take. i love my little brother to death...and i feel horrible for him...and i dont even know how to make him feel better. and to top it all off Andi still isnt waking up!! ugh...life sorta sucks right now...i need a bright side...someone wanna give me one?? haha

Tim Rice said...

Tim Rice
English 100
GWC

Poem

Within my mind there is so much
but nothing equals such
as what i passed
to someone that asked
for what i receive
and what i get
are what i believe
that only i will need
but what i give
may help another live
so give i will
and maybe heal
i know not how
i know not when
i won't know what i did
i won't know where
but i was there
when someone needed care

Tim Rice said...

question

what is the maximum number of sentences the thesis can be?

kayla said...

Kayla Marley
English 100
GWC
Post 41

So this poem is about the Holocaust, since I am writing my research on the concentration camps. Okay here it is:

As I got off the train
It started to rain
There were screams of horror
And yet so much more
The gun shots so loud
Made me so much less proud
The screams and the yells
One could never tell
All the hurt that day
I could never say
All the pain I suffered
Has only made me tougher
The separation of loved ones
Caused millions of screams
And young loves had shattered dreams
The night was cold
I have never been told
Those tears that I had cried
Never have felt so dry
The next day I found out
I knew the route
Out to the forest
To dig the graves
Of all the young ones so brave
I look up to the sky
And start to cry
I look at the birds flying so free
And wonder why that can’t be me
A Nazi starts to shout
Then pull his gun out
I get back to work
While he gave me a smirk
I hear the bell
And think this must be hell


Question: Mr. Hsiao can we e-mail you the final paper and you revise it, then send it back so we can fix it?

gcamara508 said...

my bad mr. h! i didnt know it was you when you were first waving at me in your car after class today. i honestly thought it was a crazy driver that was putting his hand up when they were slowing down at the speed bump. so when i saw you i was shocked, not cause i noticed it was you in front of me. it was cause of your not-so-much-"monster truck". haha

JGreenroyd said...

Joshua Greenroyd
Eng 100
GWC
Post 16

Poem:

Stop your work.
Turn out your lights,
And walk outside.
Look towards the skies.
Fall into a dream about deep space.
The stars, the planets, the vast open space.
Is there life out there?
Something is living among the beauty.
I do not envy the beauty,
But the kind soul that accompanies it.
One day I will see the single bright, shining star,
Watch it in awe every night
In hopes to relinquish what it shines for.
I will give it life.
In return I ask for nothing,
But hope for everything.
Maybe I was the star to another observer.
Did I ruin their dream by fulfilling my own?
Was my dream less than perfect?
I should have waited for my star,
To shoot through the sky.
My observer came into view in deep space.
I fell to my knees.
It was what I looked to the skies to see,
But never achieved.
Go back to your work.


Research question:
Is there a maximum number of sources that we can use? Or do you not care Mr. Hsiao?



Mr. Hsiao in class you said that you did not like the new James Bond movie, Quantum of Solace. Why is that?

Skagway said...

Zachary Duke
Eng 52
CC
here are a few lines from my poem and ne song called Michelle

When I open up my eyes to a devil in disguise and I know she stole my heart.
I would laugh and cry but never tell a lie to a girl that owns my heart.
She is my one and only fire

Q on the final resurch paper. dose every peragraph have to have a Quote?


and i also got some news. about 7 hours ago, the love of my life, Elizabeth. Broke my heart for (sorry for my language) Bull Fucken SHit Reasons.


Also, on Thursday, i will be on a plane to SOUTHBEND INDIANA to see Notre Dame sweep the floor with Syracuse and to see one of my exes, the reason i wrote the song. Michelle. The is suposably a Blizzerd going threw IN when we are going, so i will try to b back completely un harmed. but knowing my big mouth, that might be a strech. see you all Monday

Skagway said...

Zachary Duke
Eng 52
CC
here are a few lines from my poem and ne song called Michelle

When I open up my eyes to a devil in disguise and I know she stole my heart.
I would laugh and cry but never tell a lie to a girl that owns my heart.
She is my one and only fire

Q on the final resurch paper. dose every peragraph have to have a Quote?


and i also got some news. about 7 hours ago, the love of my life, Elizabeth. Broke my heart for (sorry for my language) Bull Fucken SHit Reasons.


Also, on Thursday, i will be on a plane to SOUTHBEND INDIANA to see Notre Dame sweep the floor with Syracuse and to see one of my exes, the reason i wrote the song. Michelle. The is suposably a Blizzerd going threw IN when we are going, so i will try to b back completely un harmed. but knowing my big mouth, that might be a strech. see you all Monday

Stephen Reynolds said...

a little excerpt of my poem called mother earth maybe... i have not decided on a title yet.

Help us Mother Earth,
for the clock is ticking.
Life is running short
while the world keeps whizzing.
The sun feels hotter yet were ignoring the reasons.
The ice is melting,
during not the right season.
Save us Mother Earth,
before its too late... to be continued.

Nick Ruiz said...

Nicholas Ruiz
English 100
20 August 2008
Post6

Bad Religion

So what does it mean?

When Religion takes a back seat to the common silver screen

Nick Ruiz said...

Nicholas Ruiz
English 100
20 August 2008
GWC
Post 7

Question:

How many lines should our poem on our research paper be?

Cianna said...
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Cianna said...

Cianna Calandrino
english 100
golden west


Please don't yell
I hear screaming in the backyard
what if the neighbors hear?
Doors slaming
Sitting in my bedroom waiting...
waiting for it to end
I pray to someone
maybe an imaginary friend or
maybe a form of god
I hear words I do not want to hear
I feel helpless
wanting to say something
but not having the courage to do so
I am just a child
Please don't yell

G. Burns said...

Greg Burns
English 100
Golden West College
Post#28

I am a very simple man
Even though I have a complex plan
I will never drive a minivan
I have had green eyes and ham
But never have stood on the Hoover Dam
I have a complex plan

I love to be real
I love to put my hands on and feel
Then you know it is real
I’ve seen the drug dealers deal
But I try to be real

I love looking at the morning sky
When I see my last I know I will cry
Hope I have a chance to say goodbye
I know that one day I will fly
Hope I get the chance to say goodbye

How many paragraphs must one type. I think more than five will be the way to go

K.LOVE said...

Kyla Bolger
English 100
gwc
post 9
Topic Question
How deep are we supposed to go into our topic?

K.LOVE said...

Kyla Bolger
English 100
gwc
post 10
My Poem
Competition!!!
Your heart beating out of your chest.
Waiting for your turn,
They call your number,
You gallop in,
Racing the clock,
Everything out of your mind,
Your horse and the obsticles,
Each jump your team gets faster and faster,
Pushing yourself through the pain,
Holding your teammate up,
Finally the last jump,
The final buzzer sounds,
The crowd cheers,
And then its quiet.

Chris said...

Chris Heidel
Eng 100
GWC

Couple lines from my poem:

I surf
therfore I am.

Thomas Rios said...

Thomas Rios
GWC
POST # ?

2 AM
Nothing good happens at this time
Only drugs, sex, and violent crime
Bars are closing, time to drive
Drunk driver crashed, barely alive
Dingy hotel and cocaine cooker
Harbor Boulevard is one big hooker
Thieves stealing throughout the night
Taking possessions then taking flight
Gangsters doing what gangsters do
Beat you up for your money then take your shoes
The night is dark and the chill has frozen
My impure thoughts that I have chosen
The streets stay filled with fear and mayhem
Like I said, nothing good happens at 2 AM.

Unknown said...

Erik perez
English 100
goldenwest

Here are a few lines of my poem

I am the Alpha Omega
Meaning I am the beginning and the ending
The past present and the future
Hip Hop fanatic with out a doubt
But unless you’re a DJ don’t try to play me

Thomas Rios said...

Question:
When is the final date that everything MUST be turned in?

solopan said...

Kayla:

WOW!!!!!!
That is an amazing poem!!!!
You are a poet.
:)

Jovana said...

Jovana Lopez
Eng 52
Cerritos College

Isaias:
You're welcome sweetie! ♥ yes we do have the numbers and you know where i live and i know where you guys live! whoo hoo! =] hehe

omg im so glad you posted that poem. it is so cute. i swear it makes me take a long hard pause with a blank set of mind. it is so beautiful. you got skills kid! hahaha love you man.

Alyssa:

I love your name BTW lol. and im sorry for everything going on in your life right now. i dont know you AT ALL, but i want you to know that life will be better for you. i cant tell you when or tell you how but i know it will. i always say that, "GOD does not give anyone an obstacle he knows the cant handle." God gives us little bumps on the road so we can become stronger for the future. Most of us have really hard and complicated lives, but we cant let them take over who we are and why we are here. We have to look on the positive side. and to cheer your little brother up, you have to show him that he WILL be fine. you have to not let him see you sad or hurt over this. Im sure he is aware that you are as afraid as he is, but just stay strong sweetie. and i know you'll be fine. You seem very intellectual and worth talkign to.

Keep your head up sunshine
and i wish your whole family, and friends the best in life!
♥♥♥

GENERAL: i have started on my poem, but i dont know which one i want to post. hmmmm. =]
good luck everyone...
aww its wednesday and theres no class =[ bummer.

back to work .

2complex 4 1dimensional minds said...

CLAIRIFICATION:


TO EVERYONE THAT HEARD MY FREESTYLE BEFORE THE GUEST SPEAKER, I SAID SOMTHINGS THAT I DONT REGRET BUT THEY DID OFFENED A FEW PEOPLE. I'M NOT P.C. SO I SAY WHAT I FEEL. AS FAR THE ISSUE WITH THE POLICE, MY 30 YEARS OLD BROTHER, AND FATHER OF 5, WAS MURDERED BY POLICE DUE TO A GRUDGE THAT AN OFFICER HELD FOR OVERS 10 YEARS. MY BROTHER WAS FIRED ON OVER 150 TIMES BY POLICE. THAN THEY DENIED HIM MEDICAL ATTENTION AND LET HIM BLEED TO DEATH, WHEN HIS LIFE COULD HAVE BEEN SAVED. THEN THEY DRAGGED HIS CORPSE FROM THE BATHROOM WHERE THEY SHOT HIM INTO THE LIVING ROOM. THAN WHEN THEY CARRIED HIS BODY TO THE CORNERS VAN THEY DROPPED IT MULITPULE TIMES AND LAUGHED AS IF THEY DID SOMTHING GREAT!!!! I SAY FUCK THE POLICE CUZ THATS WUTS IN MY SOUL. MY BROTHER WAS MURDERED BY THE POLICE BECAUSE OF A GRUDGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOTHING MORE THAN THAT. SO I WANT SOMEONE TO LOOK IN THE EYES OF HIS FIVE CHILDREN, WHO THE POLICE TURNED INTO ORPHANS, AND TELL THEM THAT THE POLICE ARE THE GOOD GUYS. COPS ARE JUST AS EVIL AS ANYONE, THEY ARE ONLY HUMAN. AND SINCE THEY ARE ONLY HUMAN THEY SHOULD BE TREATED AS SUCH, NOT BETTER NOT WORSE BUT EQUAL. SO I I CAN HATE GANG-BANGERS FOR WHAT THEY DO TO THE COMMUNITY THAT I CAN ALSO HATE COPS FOR WHAT THEY DO TO THE COMMUNITY, CUZ IT AINT ALL GOOD. MY COUSIN WAS A COP AND SHE WAS MAKE AN OUTCAST BY HER FELLOW OFFICERS FOR TELLING WHEN HER PARTNER TRADED SEX FOR FREEDOM WITH A HOOKER, SO LETS TALK ABOUT THAT. I'M ATTACKING ANYONE. I'M JUS EXPLAINING MY POSTITION. WE LIVE IN AMERICA N ITS NOT ILLEGAL(YET) TO SPEAK MY MIND. SO TO ALL OF YOU THAT WERE OFFENED I APOLGIZE, NOT FOR MY BELIFES, BUT FOR OFFENDING YOU. I AM A JUST AND HONEST MAN SO IT I OFFENED ANYONE I WILL APOLOGIZE, BUT I WILL NEVER STEP OFF MY BELIFES. THERE I TOLD EVERYONE SUMTHING THEY DONT KNOW ABOUT ME....

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